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I am a config engineer and have spent time as a Release Manager as well. Prior to that I worked logistics as an officer in the Air Force.


Jul
22
comment How do I approach rewriting an entire user guide in an agile environment?
I would start by utilizing guides that are already out there and tailoring them to your organization.
May
19
comment Please evaluate the effectiveness of both voices, which better brings the character to life?
I will try and rewrite both sections from the alternate points of view and repost them.
May
8
comment Please evaluate the effectiveness of both voices, which better brings the character to life?
I looked, that is a useful link. (I am not ignoring your answer just waiting to see if someone else has a differing viewpoint)
May
6
comment “In order to” vs “To”
Formality seems to be the difference here. "In order to" sounds more formal to me...maybe even ceremonial. i.e. "...in order to form a more perfect union." Agreed, generally it is excessive...
May
5
comment Please evaluate the effectiveness of both voices, which better brings the character to life?
Are there any authors who effectively use both voices?
May
2
comment How to introduce a world that's alien to the reader
I am working through similar issues, creating a world makes you want to share it, its hard to pull yourself out of all the things you know about the world so you want to make sure the reader knows those things to...problem is it is a lot of information and generally an info dump prologue is ignored or frowned upon. I am starting to like the idea of using periodic artworks to help facilitate. In the end if people like the book you can publish a companion book "The world of XXX"
May
2
comment Please evaluate the effectiveness of both voices, which better brings the character to life?
I guess I want to make the characters the story driver, but I don't want the world to get lost in that narrowed focus/perspective. They seem at odds currently...
May
2
comment Please evaluate the effectiveness of both voices, which better brings the character to life?
Well I plan it to be an epic. Multiple stories intertwined, a new universe in my head (hence the interest in the world building proposal) in the end multiple books. I have back stories written and basically a timeline from the beginning of creation. I think for the first book it will follow two, maybe three main characters. There is plenty of story available probably more than I need, and I do probably need to focus more on making the characters feel real. Is there a way to mix voices effectively? Could you do entire chapters in one or the other? I've always considered that bad...
May
1
asked Please evaluate the effectiveness of both voices, which better brings the character to life?
Apr
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Apr
29
comment International self publishing: where to start?
You looking at digital publishing or traditional paper publishing...or both?
Apr
14
answered Is there such a thing as a “reverse analogy”?
Mar
12
comment What is a good tool for organizing story notes?
Lauren I created an opportunity for you to promote scrivener on the Software Recommendation Exchange site softwarerecs.stackexchange.com/questions/2269/…
Mar
6
comment Critque on how this sits as a prologue
And for what its worth I did the exact same thing when I first posted here...also check my previous comment I updated it with some links that may be helpful.
Mar
6
comment Critque on how this sits as a prologue
No apologies necessary, the SE sites tend to have a pretty narrow Specific Question, Specific answer focus. You may be better served with a writers group, either locally or online. These questions may provide some guidance in that arena 1) writers.stackexchange.com/questions/5557/… and 2: writers.stackexchange.com/questions/124/…
Mar
6
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Mar
6
comment Critque on how this sits as a prologue
This is currently too vague and opinion based. If you have specific aspects of your writing you would like reviewed please edit the question.
Feb
27
awarded  Quorum
Feb
24
reviewed Excellent tinyURL seen as risky by readers?
Feb
24
awarded  Custodian