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The difference between the almost right word and the right word is really a large matter — it's the difference between a lightning bug and the lightning. — Mark Twain

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comment Needing to Believe the Story Is Real
@PavelJanicek aka Choose Your Own Adventure! en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Choose_your_own_adventure
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comment Does this urge you to read further or stop?
@dmm of course, point taken, but what specifically caught my eye was "Sector 4" (District 12), the idea that you had to get up early to get eggs in that sector, a dividing Wall which has to be monitored, and the idea that the narrator risks being "chosen" for something terrible. "Exciting and future-determining" isn't "being reaped for death." I haven't read The Giver so I can't say if THG rips it off. I have read THG, so I am saying to the OP that as a reader, that's the first thing I notice.
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comment Pulling the reader out of the narrative: When it's too much?
Not to mention the description is kind of creepy. The narrator's own mother is being described in glowing sexual terms. Would you ever say your mom had firm breasts? Even if you could bounce a quarter off them?
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comment Does this urge you to read further or stop?
My immediate thought is that this is a fairly direct lift of The Hunger Games with a little Divergent thrown in. So no, I don't want to read any more, because it smacks of "ripoff" to me. Sorry. Your story may in fact be quite original, but that's not the vibe I'm getting here.
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comment Writing and Formatting and Tips on Poetry
Is the book subtitled Poems to Piss Off Odin and Edgar Allen Poe?
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comment Writing and Formatting and Tips on Poetry
might one ask what "blinky blinky" translates to in English?
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comment does this paragraph persuade you to feel as though this couple is deserving of the award?
Hi, and welcome to Writers. We have specific guidelines about asking for help with a written work. meta.writers.stackexchange.com/questions/166/… "Help me make it better" is too vague for us to do anything with.
Aug
24
comment The president, the nickel and the dime
This question appears to be off-topic because it is not about anything to do with writing.
Aug
24
comment What's the ideal usage for italics for names?
@NeilFein Apostrophes? Do you mean quotes?
Aug
22
comment Main male character description
@drusepth Yep, BBC Sherlock was my exact thought...
Aug
21
comment Defining a Prologue
ooh, yes, good point. Strictly speaking, none of a book should be boring, but particularly any part of the opening, I agree.
Aug
20
comment How can I balance between a formal and informal tone?
Hi, and welcome to Writers. What's the context for your writing? Blog posts? A novel? Academic writing? Business? This will help us answer your question.
Aug
19
comment DIT:Is it legal if a write a book about an artist?
"Time plots of the surface area of her costumes." Now that would be an entertaining chart to design.
Aug
19
comment DIT:Is it legal if a write a book about an artist?
Is this a biography of Miley Cyrus's rise to popularity from a marketing perspective, or a marketing primer using Cyrus as an example? Those are two very different things and would fall under different sets of rules.
Aug
19
comment Do the guidelines for clear style that we use today get in the way of rhythm?
FWIW, while this is quite lovely, my eyes glazed over several times while reading it. Brevity and clarity aid in readability. Scripture has room and time for poetry. Most workaday writing does not.
Aug
19
comment Do Decimals Bounded Between 0 and 1 (inclusive) Need a Leading Zero?
This makes sense. I never thought about probabilities and baseball scores, but you're right; those don't need leading zeroes. Otherwise yes, use one.
Aug
18
comment Nonfiction: Need signed releases and/or pay subjects I am interviewing?
Hi, and welcome to Writers. You might want to browse other questions under the "legal" tag to see if there are useful answers already posted (although caveat lector, I don't believe we have any lawyers on the board).
Aug
15
comment How can I make it more erotic?
1) you have entirely changed your question. 2) Proofreading requests are off-topic here. meta.writers.stackexchange.com/questions/301/…
Aug
10
comment Word for “work completed on behalf of…”
Hi joe, and welcome to Writers. Requests for single words are off-topic here, but I believe they are acceptable on English. I have flagged to ask mods to move this question.
Aug
10
comment Tension built upon whether the main character will commit suicide or not. Problem: I'm using first person narrative
not quite a duplicate but very relevant: writers.stackexchange.com/questions/7612/…