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Jul
22
reviewed No Action Needed How should I break up chapters in a novel?
Jul
21
comment Does it sound more natural to use the character's way of speaking while describing his/her inner thoughts?
@AlexandroChen I'd have to see a larger piece in context, but my first impulse is to stick with my original answer: you can have something set in a 5YO perspective if the entire scene is that way. The extended example is not the entire scene; it's just one beat from her perspective. For me that would be jarring.
Jul
20
reviewed Reject What are some examples of modern original plots?
Jul
20
comment Does it sound more natural to use the character's way of speaking while describing his/her inner thoughts?
@PaulA.Clayton Let me know if my edit addressed your question.
Jul
20
revised Does it sound more natural to use the character's way of speaking while describing his/her inner thoughts?
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Jul
19
answered Does it sound more natural to use the character's way of speaking while describing his/her inner thoughts?
Jul
19
comment Swearing - Censor, allude, or include?
FWIW, the profanity makes absolute sense in the context of your scene.
Jul
19
reviewed Edit Expectation of privacy using a pseudonym?
Jul
19
revised Expectation of privacy using a pseudonym?
corrected spelling and grammar.
Jul
19
answered Attributing quotes to fictional characters
Jul
19
comment Swearing - Censor, allude, or include?
@Singular1ty Well, Molly Weasley does tell Bellatrix "Get away from my daughter, you bitch!" in the Battle of Hogwarts, but she had really good reason.
Jul
19
comment Swearing - Censor, allude, or include?
@PaulA.Clayton I take some of your points, but you could write it as James muttered, "Shit," under his breath and it would have the same importance. The USB stick is what he's swearing about, unlike in Anthony Russo's answer, where the character's blurted obscenity is the point of that sentence.
Jul
18
comment Swearing - Censor, allude, or include?
Well, what the fuck did he do?
Jul
18
comment Swearing - Censor, allude, or include?
"If it's not clear to the reader that a character is angry or upset without including swear words in the dialog, there are problems with your writing." The swear words may or may not be for shock; they definitely indicate intensity. Sometimes you cannot indicate the depth of a character's feelings any other way than to show the extremity to which s/he is forced. It does not, by definition, mean "there are problems with [the] writing." As a reader you are of course free not to read books with profanity, but profanity doesn't make the book "broken."
Jul
18
answered Swearing - Censor, allude, or include?
Jul
18
comment Swearing - Censor, allude, or include?
@jwpat7 No, I disagree. The very fact that I can't imagine a swear word which a construction worker wouldn't say makes it pretty funny to me. It's also clearly hyperbole.
Jul
15
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Jul
12
answered Should a piece of fiction be made of 100% concise writing?
Jul
12
answered Why do authors start a paragraph in an indirect way?
Jul
12
answered Who is the perfect rival to the right-person-wrong-time character in a love triangle?