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The difference between the almost right word and the right word is really a large matter — it's the difference between a lightning bug and the lightning. — Mark Twain

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Mar
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revised Problems with constructing a complex sentence with many ideas in it
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Mar
9
comment Problems with constructing a complex sentence with many ideas in it
I had an excellent English professor point out the back and forth/take and bring problem to me. It was in passing, he wasn't even my teacher at the time, and it was one of the most useful tidbits of writing advice I ever got.
Mar
9
answered What tense to use in an academic paper when speaking about correspondence?
Mar
9
revised Problems with constructing a complex sentence with many ideas in it
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Mar
9
answered Problems with constructing a complex sentence with many ideas in it
Mar
8
comment Does there have to be a difference when writing different genders?
Possibly of use: writers.stackexchange.com/questions/4325/…
Mar
8
comment “The company from Redmond” vs “The Redmond company.”
I prefer "the company from Redmond" as well. As Sean notes above, it is the company from Redmond, and this also eliminates even the least confusion that you somehow might be talking about some other company which happens to be named "Redmond."
Mar
8
awarded  Electorate
Mar
7
comment Books to improve writing skills
Skydiving, for example. Chainsaw juggling.
Mar
7
revised MLA formatting for multiple in-text citations of the same soure
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Mar
7
comment Explaining that experience is far greater than official job title implies
You could go over to GraphicDesignSE and ask about workflow -- who in an office is responsible for creative, marketing, proofreading, and so on throughout a job's lifecycle.
Mar
7
comment Explaining that experience is far greater than official job title implies
At the agency where I was a graphic production artist, the AM was responsible for getting the correct specs to the designer and to the print purchaser. Those specs traveled with the job to production (me), through several rounds with a proofreader, to the pre-press department, and finally to print purchasing again before the job left the office. So four to six people were responsible for checking specs. AMs may be in on the initial creative meeting, but it's really the Art Director or Designer who is responsible for being creative. (cont'd)
Mar
6
revised Explaining that experience is far greater than official job title implies
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Mar
6
comment Explaining that experience is far greater than official job title implies
Yes, because a resume is intended to get your foot in the door. It's showing what skills you have. By saying you "acted" as a jr acct mgr, you are describing the tasks you did. Once you get an interview, then you can explain in detail what that line means. I will edit my answer to address the other issue.
Mar
6
answered Not knowing a character's name. Would this be frustrating for the reader?
Mar
6
comment Describing a machine's world in a metaphorical manner
Don't try be concise. It's a metaphor and it's your first draft. Keep revising your paragraph above, keep making it more lyrical and less vague, and you'll be closer to what you want. Eventually you will get the right image, but don't start small and grow grudgingly. Start big and whittle away unnecessary words.
Mar
6
answered Explaining that experience is far greater than official job title implies
Mar
6
comment Should I prefer long or short sentences in scientific writing?
@DaveBall: Great, so you've identified what not to do: Don't use too many choppy sentences. You should use long sentences when appropriate.
Mar
6
answered Should I prefer long or short sentences in scientific writing?
Mar
5
comment How could the surprise-villain thread have been less contrived in “Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone”?
The upshot is, Harry is not going to recognize his own prejudice, or his own error, until he's much older. You can't retcon the 11YO Harry to understand what 17YO Harry or 30something Harry grasps. So no, you can't make Harry more obviously wrong. (In fact, that really pissed me off at the end of book 6!) I think Gabe is right; you have to give more evidence that Snape is not what Harry thinks he is, and let the reader figure it out even if Harry doesn't.