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comment Does this sound like someone at the end of their conflict with emotions? Please help
1) Capitulation doesn't "rise." It's a surrender, a falling. 2) How can the narrator's anger escape the inferno of the demon's anger? I'm lost. 3) You have contradictory things going on here: You want the narrator to end a conflict (with his/her emotions), but the end result is that he's angry. That's conflict. I could see being overwhelmed and giving in TO anger (c.f. Luke vs. Palpatine), but this paragraph doesn't make much sense.
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comment Does this sound like someone at the end of their conflict with emotions? Please help
Not when your last line is "the war was far from over."
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comment Publishing price comparisons. Is it allowed?
@SF. Fascinating! I had no idea. I see price-comparison sites all the time and I had no idea that the vendors gave them any grief.
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comment Publishing price comparisons. Is it allowed?
@NeilFein That was my thought also. This would be perfect for a website. And those price comparisons are posted on the web all the time, so I can't see legal issues there.
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comment Variation in paragraph length
No worries. It's a poem by Alexander Pope poetry.eserver.org/essay-on-criticism.html which demonstrates the effects it discusses. (My fave is "ten low words oft creep in one dull line.") And I, as an English major, started Moby-Dick and refused to finish it because it was a damn brick, so hold your head high re that. :)
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comment Publishing price comparisons. Is it allowed?
Do you mean "Plan it ahead yourself funeral"? I'm struggling a bit to conceive of hosting one's OWN funeral...
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comment Variation in paragraph length
Are you a fan of Essay on Criticism? :)
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comment Variation in paragraph length
@JohnM.Landsberg I am pleased to express my gratitude for your felicitous if abbreviated commentary on my response. ;)
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comment Tone and directness in inviting prospective team member
Have you had the least success with this technique before? Because I would immediately dismiss this as spam/phishing, particularly when you use "with joy." No professional uses that, especially not with cold-calling. This is going to be trashed by 99.44% of your recipients because nobody is going to think it's legitimate. Can you join a LinkedIn group instead and post a job opening there, so people can apply?
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answered Variation in paragraph length
Jun
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answered Does the country matter in a story if it is set in a real one?
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comment Need Help Understanding the Meaning of Certain Topics in a Writing Contest
@Tannalein You should make that an answer; I think that's pretty much nailed it.
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comment story driven by event rhythm
@Psicofrenia I took a writing course on Campbell and the Hero's Journey, and Star Wars was the first work we studied.
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comment story driven by event rhythm
@SF. Sorry, I was making a joke. The Disney movie The Princess and the Frog is very merry and upbeat despite the setbacks and heartbreak.
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comment story driven by event rhythm
Was that The Princess and the Frog?
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comment story driven by event rhythm
Star Wars is very explicitly a Hero's Journey trilogy; Lucas openly said he studied Campbell in its creation.
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comment story driven by event rhythm
Hi, and welcome to Writers SE. You obviously know how SE works, so you know not to ask discussion questions. That said: 1) You have two interesting questions here, so please separate them and post them individually. I think there's fertile ground for both. 2) Both your questions lean towards subjectivity ("What's your take?" "I think it could be...") so please edit and tighten to make sure they are purely answerable questions, not launching points for discussion.
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comment Shared world contract
I'm not a lawyer, so I can't tell you about the intricacies of copyright law. Severability basically means that if one part of the contract ("Buddy agrees not to violate continuity") is declared invalid, it doesn't invalidate anything else; the rest of the contract still holds. You'd have to talk to a copyright lawyer to determine what copyrights you'd hold. I also don't know if a publishing contract would automatically override a personal one.
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answered Shared world contract