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The difference between the almost right word and the right word is really a large matter — it's the difference between a lightning bug and the lightning. — Mark Twain

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wiki created apa description
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wiki created apa excerpt
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wiki created antagonist description
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wiki created antagonist excerpt
Jun
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awarded  Strunk & White
Jun
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revised Should I switch to third person or continue in first person?
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Jun
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revised Is it a bad idea to linger too long on a first draft?
added 1 characters in body
Jun
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comment Style signatures and uncommon formatting patterns
You may indicate pauses in speech with ellipses and m-dashes; there is no grammatical rule against it. The three marks of punctuation indicate different kinds of pauses. A comma is a quick pause, an m-dash means the speaker has stopped abruptly or been interrupted, and an ellipsis means the person has trailed off. You can use all three, depending on what effect you want.
Jun
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reviewed Approve suggested edit on Style signatures and uncommon formatting patterns
May
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comment When writing on paper, how do you move things about?
This is the exact reason I moved to a word processor as soon as I could. I can barely conceive of trying to write without the flexibility of digital typing anymore.
May
30
comment In a “learn to do X” book, should a section review come before the quiz / exercises or after?
+1 for "don't hide information if you want to teach people." That should go on a bumpersticker. :)
May
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answered What are “industry leading royalties”?
May
29
answered In a “learn to do X” book, should a section review come before the quiz / exercises or after?
May
28
revised How can I deal with an overload of writing projects?
edited body
May
27
comment Is this dialogue and situation intriguing (short story)?
Yes, you pretty much changed the entire story snippet with the dialogue you added. :) that makes more sense now.
May
26
comment Is this dialogue and situation intriguing (short story)?
Again, if this is part of a plot point -- she's an alien shapeshifter pitcher plant who's waiting for him to come over so she can bite him -- I am totally fine with that. But then give the reader a clue: "He watched her for a while before going over, to see if he could spot the telltale trigger hairs on her arms." Or "He inhaled deeply. [Aliens] always smelled sickly-sweet, like too many calla lilies." You don't have to give the end away, but something to alert the reader that this not what it seems.
May
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comment Is this dialogue and situation intriguing (short story)?
I'm not intrigued; I'm irritated. If you're doing it on purpose, that's actually fine, but you need to let the reader know that the characters are in some way damaged. And I have to say: if you see a woman dressed only in a bikini lying sprawled on the ground (which is not a beach), you wouldn't check on her to make sure she's not injured or dead? That is aberrant behavior which needs to be explained. People have empathy for the potentially injured.
May
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answered Is this dialogue and situation intriguing (short story)?
May
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answered Why are license agreements, disclaiming letters and others written with capital letters?
May
25
comment Using today's moral compass in fantasy
@IndorilNerevar: I didn't downvote you, so I can't answer that.