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Jun
28
comment story driven by event rhythm
@SF. Sorry, I was making a joke. The Disney movie The Princess and the Frog is very merry and upbeat despite the setbacks and heartbreak.
Jun
28
comment story driven by event rhythm
Was that The Princess and the Frog?
Jun
28
comment story driven by event rhythm
Star Wars is very explicitly a Hero's Journey trilogy; Lucas openly said he studied Campbell in its creation.
Jun
28
comment story driven by event rhythm
Hi, and welcome to Writers SE. You obviously know how SE works, so you know not to ask discussion questions. That said: 1) You have two interesting questions here, so please separate them and post them individually. I think there's fertile ground for both. 2) Both your questions lean towards subjectivity ("What's your take?" "I think it could be...") so please edit and tighten to make sure they are purely answerable questions, not launching points for discussion.
Jun
28
comment Shared world contract
I'm not a lawyer, so I can't tell you about the intricacies of copyright law. Severability basically means that if one part of the contract ("Buddy agrees not to violate continuity") is declared invalid, it doesn't invalidate anything else; the rest of the contract still holds. You'd have to talk to a copyright lawyer to determine what copyrights you'd hold. I also don't know if a publishing contract would automatically override a personal one.
Jun
27
answered Shared world contract
Jun
27
answered About the Author description
Jun
27
comment Opening a story with a reference to what someone just said followed by a setting description
So let's revise: "The TOSSAIS? The Tree Of Staggering Size And Incredible Age? That's just a paranoid rumor cooked up by end-times conspiracy theorists." Edit as needed.
Jun
27
answered Opening a story with a reference to what someone just said followed by a setting description
Jun
27
comment Intervening Characters in fiction
@Tannalein Intervening = one who intervenes. How would you spell it?
Jun
26
comment Intervening Characters in fiction
You might try searching in TVTropes for Gandalf or Archetypal Character and see how far you get. tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/ArchetypalCharacter WARNING TVTropes is a known, massive time-suck. Be prepared to lose whole weekends browsing the site. It's very informative, but pack a lunch.
Jun
25
comment Can Anybody Write an “Unauthorized” Guide?
FWIW, my grandmother never liked nuBSG. She did enjoy Buffy the Vampire Slayer, however.
Jun
23
comment How to avoid repetition
No comma, omit both (as StoneyB explains), and add respectively: "X and Y are sold in that store for $200 and $300 respectively." The comma doesn't add anything. These aren't clauses and no pause is required.
Jun
23
comment How to avoid repetition
I'd say "many good ways." Most implies a finite list.
Jun
22
comment where would be a good place to find writers for my staff?
And why would "good writers" do "free work" for you?
Jun
21
comment Does the following piece have too much dry narration (mundane tasks, moving about)?
@alexchenco Yes, much improved. You need more of that. And your heroine needs not to sit there unless you explain to us why she's so helplessly passive. If she were in a wheelchair and literally couldn't go anywhere without help, fine (and that would add to the horror at the end of the story), but she's physically fine.
Jun
21
comment Separate paragraphs without line breaks
I've seen Wired magazine do this when a large intro section has multiple paragraphs.
Jun
21
comment Separate paragraphs without line breaks
To force SE to put in those spaces you need to use the non-breaking space HTML character, which I've done for you.
Jun
21
revised Separate paragraphs without line breaks
added the non-breaking spaces which OP intended
Jun
21
answered Does the following piece have too much dry narration (mundane tasks, moving about)?