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The difference between the almost right word and the right word is really a large matter — it's the difference between a lightning bug and the lightning. — Mark Twain

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Feb
23
comment Does “reversing” characters provide enough of a “disconnect ”to defend against a libel suit?
"Reversing" the characters is probably one good step. I wouldn't call it blanket sufficient, but it would depend on the characteristics of the source person and how recognizable that person is.
Feb
23
reviewed No Action Needed How to deal with online comments to published pieces?
Feb
23
reviewed No Action Needed How can I write a thesis statement and stay on topic in a persuasive essay?
Feb
22
comment How to write a conversation
Really? Have you seen that in a novel? A newspaper article?
Feb
19
answered How do you make a vague metaphor more easy to understand?
Feb
19
reviewed Reviewed How can clarity and flow of long sentences be improved?
Feb
19
comment How can clarity and flow of long sentences be improved?
1) This reordering actually makes it more confusing. The year is the most important thought here. 2) No comma after "island."
Feb
19
reviewed Reviewed Referencing figure in text - capitalize the word “Figure” or not? Why?
Feb
19
comment Referencing figure in text - capitalize the word “Figure” or not? Why?
1) I enjoy doing what during the summer? 2) No, you wouldn't capitalize "the Winter of 1988," because "winter" still isn't a proper name. "World War II" is a proper name; "We protested the war" isn't. You might say "the Blizzard of 1988," because there may or may not be a blizzard in a given year, but every year has a winter. Seasons are always generic.
Feb
19
reviewed No Action Needed Resource for someone better at editing than writing
Feb
19
reviewed No Action Needed Resource for someone better at editing than writing
Feb
19
reviewed No Action Needed How do I keep the plot interesting in a humorous book?
Feb
19
comment How do you make a vague metaphor more easy to understand?
I like what you're trying to do with the metaphor. I don't know if it will work here because you're trying to reference another metaphor. Silence is not literally a color; the phrase means "silence is as valuable as gold." If the refusal to speak is a good thing, maybe you can make it work, but if the narrator is entreating the other person to speak, I don't think you can cross your imagery.
Feb
19
comment What are the copyright limitations for adopting a ficitonal character's name as your Pen Name?
"Dumbledore" is also apparently slang for "bumblebee"; I don't think she invented the word. en.wiktionary.org/wiki/dumbledore
Feb
19
comment Changing location in a fiction story with two or more story lines happening at same time
@MarkRoss You don't write "meanwhile" if you don't have a POV character telling the story. In your example, you would switch to the couple in bed, and they would talk or cuddle or do whatever, and five pages into that scene they would hear the preacher run by their house yelling some of the same dialogue we've already heard. This makes it clear that the previous scene is more or less simultaneous with the current one.
Feb
18
comment Changing location in a fiction story with two or more story lines happening at same time
Also, add some time-stamping or time-orienting elements, like noting that it's the morning, or setting it after an event which the reader knows happened at the beginning of the previous scene.
Feb
18
comment Ending a PhD thesis by saying “there is more to do”
@Shahbaz I think you need the sentence for reading flow. The overall paragraph is positive; that sentence just helps smooth it out.
Feb
18
answered Ending a PhD thesis by saying “there is more to do”
Feb
18
comment Ending a PhD thesis by saying “there is more to do”
Can you use that section to sketch out proposed ways to move forward? If there's more to do, what is there to do? Even if it's broad strokes?
Feb
18
reviewed No Action Needed Right usage of “P.S.” in Emails