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The difference between the almost right word and the right word is really a large matter — it's the difference between a lightning bug and the lightning. — Mark Twain

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Aug
29
revised Is my opening chapter too short?
Removed novel summary, as you should have one question per post
Aug
28
comment Simple rules for separating paragraphs in books?
This is a Your Mileage May Vary question. It depends on the content, the writing style, the intended audience, the tone, and occasionally the demands of persnickety typesetters ::ahem::. There's no right answer.
Aug
28
reviewed Reviewed Is it better to describe the main character's physical appearance early on in the story?
Aug
28
reviewed No Action Needed What resources are there for finding ONLINE writing partners?
Aug
28
reviewed Approve suggested edit on What resources are there for finding ONLINE writing partners?
Aug
27
answered Should I specify the time/date at the beginning of a scene?
Aug
27
comment Needing to Believe the Story Is Real
@PavelJanicek aka Choose Your Own Adventure! en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Choose_your_own_adventure
Aug
27
answered Needing to Believe the Story Is Real
Aug
27
comment Does this urge you to read further or stop?
@dmm of course, point taken, but what specifically caught my eye was "Sector 4" (District 12), the idea that you had to get up early to get eggs in that sector, a dividing Wall which has to be monitored, and the idea that the narrator risks being "chosen" for something terrible. "Exciting and future-determining" isn't "being reaped for death." I haven't read The Giver so I can't say if THG rips it off. I have read THG, so I am saying to the OP that as a reader, that's the first thing I notice.
Aug
26
comment Pulling the reader out of the narrative: When it's too much?
Not to mention the description is kind of creepy. The narrator's own mother is being described in glowing sexual terms. Would you ever say your mom had firm breasts? Even if you could bounce a quarter off them?
Aug
26
comment Does this urge you to read further or stop?
My immediate thought is that this is a fairly direct lift of The Hunger Games with a little Divergent thrown in. So no, I don't want to read any more, because it smacks of "ripoff" to me. Sorry. Your story may in fact be quite original, but that's not the vibe I'm getting here.
Aug
25
comment Writing and Formatting and Tips on Poetry
Is the book subtitled Poems to Piss Off Odin and Edgar Allen Poe?
Aug
25
comment Writing and Formatting and Tips on Poetry
might one ask what "blinky blinky" translates to in English?
Aug
25
comment does this paragraph persuade you to feel as though this couple is deserving of the award?
Hi, and welcome to Writers. We have specific guidelines about asking for help with a written work. meta.writers.stackexchange.com/questions/166/… "Help me make it better" is too vague for us to do anything with.
Aug
24
comment The president, the nickel and the dime
This question appears to be off-topic because it is not about anything to do with writing.
Aug
24
revised What's the ideal usage for italics for names?
added 388 characters in body
Aug
24
comment What's the ideal usage for italics for names?
@NeilFein Apostrophes? Do you mean quotes?
Aug
23
answered What's the ideal usage for italics for names?
Aug
23
awarded  Enlightened
Aug
23
awarded  Nice Answer