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comment Is my opening chapter too short?
Hi Connor, and welcome to Writers. I've removed the paragraph about the summary of your novel, for two reasons: 1) we try to stick with one question per post, and your one question remains above. 2) asking for "general feedback" about your plot is off-topic here; we're not a discussion site, and the answers would be too localized to help anyone else in the future.
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revised Is my opening chapter too short?
Removed novel summary, as you should have one question per post
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comment Beautiful and meaningful messages for praising my friend who has helped the needy infants of an orphanage?
This question appears to be off-topic because it is a "what to write" question
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comment Simple rules for separating paragraphs in books?
This is a Your Mileage May Vary question. It depends on the content, the writing style, the intended audience, the tone, and occasionally the demands of persnickety typesetters ::ahem::. There's no right answer.
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reviewed Reviewed Is it better to describe the main character's physical appearance early on in the story?
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reviewed No Action Needed What resources are there for finding ONLINE writing partners?
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reviewed Approve suggested edit on What resources are there for finding ONLINE writing partners?
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answered Should I specify the time/date at the beginning of a scene?
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comment Needing to Believe the Story Is Real
@PavelJanicek aka Choose Your Own Adventure! en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Choose_your_own_adventure
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answered Needing to Believe the Story Is Real
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comment Does this urge you to read further or stop?
@dmm of course, point taken, but what specifically caught my eye was "Sector 4" (District 12), the idea that you had to get up early to get eggs in that sector, a dividing Wall which has to be monitored, and the idea that the narrator risks being "chosen" for something terrible. "Exciting and future-determining" isn't "being reaped for death." I haven't read The Giver so I can't say if THG rips it off. I have read THG, so I am saying to the OP that as a reader, that's the first thing I notice.
Aug
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comment Pulling the reader out of the narrative: When it's too much?
Not to mention the description is kind of creepy. The narrator's own mother is being described in glowing sexual terms. Would you ever say your mom had firm breasts? Even if you could bounce a quarter off them?
Aug
26
comment Does this urge you to read further or stop?
My immediate thought is that this is a fairly direct lift of The Hunger Games with a little Divergent thrown in. So no, I don't want to read any more, because it smacks of "ripoff" to me. Sorry. Your story may in fact be quite original, but that's not the vibe I'm getting here.
Aug
25
comment Writing and Formatting and Tips on Poetry
Is the book subtitled Poems to Piss Off Odin and Edgar Allen Poe?
Aug
25
comment Writing and Formatting and Tips on Poetry
might one ask what "blinky blinky" translates to in English?
Aug
25
comment does this paragraph persuade you to feel as though this couple is deserving of the award?
Hi, and welcome to Writers. We have specific guidelines about asking for help with a written work. meta.writers.stackexchange.com/questions/166/… "Help me make it better" is too vague for us to do anything with.
Aug
24
comment The president, the nickel and the dime
This question appears to be off-topic because it is not about anything to do with writing.
Aug
24
revised What's the ideal usage for italics for names?
added 388 characters in body
Aug
24
comment What's the ideal usage for italics for names?
@NeilFein Apostrophes? Do you mean quotes?
Aug
23
answered What's the ideal usage for italics for names?