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Mar
17
comment Does this sentence excessively break the fourth wall?
Incidentally, it appears Annihilus just formed a tiny star; if I did the arithmetic correctly, a 50kg person (small man) compressed into a cube 0.05cm (big font) in width (125x10^-6 cubic centimeters) is over 2 million times denser than the Sun's core (which Wikipedia states is up to 150 g per cubic centimeter). I am not a physicist, but that compression would probably also bring the temperature up to the level of stellar cores (or higher). "nothing more than a sphere of pulverized flesh" is probably more 'accurate' though less visceral.
Mar
17
comment Comparison for something that's 251 million tons
Incidentally using "more than" or "about/almost N times more than" rather than "about" increases the sense of magnitude. (Similarly, "less than" or "about/not even an Nth the [dimensionality: mass, size, length, duration, etc.] of" can increase the sense of tininess.)
Mar
17
comment Comparison for something that's 251 million tons
@what In addition to the familiarity factor (which is important), at such less familiar scales giving a sense of magnitude (whether small or large) is also important. Comparing to mountain masses is popular for large masses, but using the car reference one might compare to the mass of registered cars in the U.S. (For a light essay targeting a science-literate audience, I would be tempted to write "about 25 teaspoonfuls of neutron star matter", but that is more playful than informative.)
Mar
16
reviewed Reject Is Academic Ghostwriting legal?
Mar
9
reviewed Approve How to indicate that a single letter was removed from a quotation
Mar
6
reviewed Reject Is Academic Ghostwriting legal?
Mar
6
reviewed Edit and Reopen Structuring a novel like a television or graphic novel series
Mar
6
revised Structuring a novel like a television or graphic novel series
fixed capitalization, added commas, corrected typo, tried to make the Q more focused (that part might need to be reverted)
Mar
6
awarded  Custodian
Mar
6
reviewed Reopen Including a deceased person in a dedication
Mar
6
comment Should I create my own ConLang for my story?
I may have to give this answer a bounty!
Mar
6
comment Should I create my own ConLang for my story?
Incidentally, snippets are often useful for communicating unique concepts such as kemmer from LeGuin's The Left Hand of Darkness or just giving an impression of difference (and sometimes "tone"). (I consider such minimal vocabulary construction as still part of ConLang design. Even more fleshed out fictional languages may not derive complete etymologies, dialects, and other features of real languages.)
Mar
1
reviewed Reject How to describe the dissipation of tension between two people?
Feb
23
answered How can I structure a novel to contain short stories?
Feb
19
comment How can clarity and flow of long sentences be improved?
A Meta question asks if the edit makes this question appropriately broad or too broad. (The Meta question also includes a proposed answer, so even if the edited version is too broad at least a (I believe) somewhat decent answer is available.)
Feb
19
revised How can clarity and flow of long sentences be improved?
rephrased to be a broader (i.e., not "too localized"), hopefully not too broad
Feb
19
comment How can clarity and flow of long sentences be improved?
Incidentally, Wikipedia indicates that Dutch rule ended in 1662, so presumably 1664 would not be "during the Dutch occupation".
Feb
17
revised What exactly is a copywriter?
clarified source of quotations and "writer of cars"
Feb
12
reviewed Leave Open At what point in editing / revising does one poem become another poem?
Feb
12
reviewed Close What “kind” of writing is The Fixation of Belief essay by Charles Sanders Pierce?