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Apr
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comment Should I use ellipses in narration?
Hmm, somehow I think it would look better if you remove the elipsis and italicize 'talk' because this is what appears to be the main issue for 'him'. In my mind, using the elipsis like this makes it seem like the above snippet is from someone in your story telling the story.
Aug
20
comment Background speech with foreground dialogue
Erm, okay? I guess that part wasn't so obvious. I did intend those bits to be from the POV of the protagonist. It feels though, that by saying "when Ricky's attention was caught by a word that stood out from the general noise of the talking crowd", it's more telling than showing, whereas if a reader correctly interprets the second italicised dialogue as from the background, I feel it to be a bit more effective. I wonder if anyone could add their thoughts on this maybe?
Aug
20
comment Background speech with foreground dialogue
Hmm, I'm not too sure about this, because... have you ever been in a situation where, while there are more than one thing going on, you are observing/hearing/sensing different things? You can be actively listening to someone speaking to you, but in the pauses, you also get to hear background noise, and it doesn't need great attention to pick up some key words, especially if they are told with specific intonation; and usually good speakers are good at that, otherwise, people would get bored during their speeches ;)
Aug
20
comment Background speech with foreground dialogue
Thank you for the answer :) It certainly helps to confirm the technique to do this I believe!
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I'm not sure it helps the OP, and isn't it what the OP tried to do here?
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