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Feb
19
comment Flashback or dream as a means of hinting at more going on than meets the eye
Let me give you a short explanation of what i have in mind. Bare with me though, as i have a harder time explaining my ideas then i do just writing them. She is dreaming a memory, like say the last ten minutes. I would describe what she sees, burning homes, charred flesh and what not. I planned to have her shoot some one that was fleeing, then the person that she is with would turn on her and then things she hears in the real world would start to filter though. Thing this person says in the dream would actually be what she is hearing while she sleeps. Then as he attacks, she wakes up.
Feb
19
asked Flashback or dream as a means of hinting at more going on than meets the eye
Feb
16
accepted Am i using “he/she” too often during action scenes?
Feb
16
comment Am i using “he/she” too often during action scenes?
That is another of my issues, i feel like I'm using "Giants" far too often but I'm not really sure what else i could use. I read through the excerpt a good four times before i found the "one" you referred to... kind of made me laugh. Anyway thanks for the tips i will be sure change those around.
Feb
16
awarded  Custodian
Feb
16
reviewed Approve Am i using “he/she” too often during action scenes?
Feb
15
asked Am i using “he/she” too often during action scenes?
Feb
13
comment How to have a character be nameless for the first few paragraphs of a book?
I would link to what i wrote so you guys could see what i mean but I'm not sure if this site allows for something like that. Anyway thanks for all the help, it was quite useful.
Feb
13
comment How to have a character be nameless for the first few paragraphs of a book?
I managed to make it work using he/him/his and then later on down the line when he meets the other character i had him mention the nickname his mother used to get his attention. Like Lauren said yesterday, i wanted the nickname to be something that wouldn't work as a name. In this case Number Two, that way the other character felt compelled to give him a real name, whether he liked it or not. However, i agree with Jays answer too, thankfully the culture that he is from only plays a roll in the very beginning, and helping to shape his personality of course.
Feb
12
awarded  Scholar
Feb
12
accepted How to have a character be nameless for the first few paragraphs of a book?
Feb
12
awarded  Student
Feb
12
comment How to have a character be nameless for the first few paragraphs of a book?
I think for now I'm going to experiment with "Number Two." I plan to avoid using it as much as i can, other then a small explanation stating that it was what his parents referred to him as growing up. He was the second born so it makes sense.
Feb
12
comment How to have a character be nameless for the first few paragraphs of a book?
I do plan to use those quite a bit, i just figured he would need to be called something to start with. I mean i cant open with "He walked through the jungle." Or at least my brain doesn't want to work in that way. But as Lauren Ipsum suggested below i think i can come up with a "filler title" to start it off.
Feb
12
comment How to have a character be nameless for the first few paragraphs of a book?
Sorry i should have mentioned that the plan is for it to be in third person view, and be a novel. Whether it actually gets that far remains to be seen. I like how you put your answer though. I think a place holder name or title would work; his character is the quiet brooding type so maybe something along the lines of "Quiet One" sounds kind of lame but something like that. A personality trait, or maybe a reference to an animal that has a similar demeanor. Thanks for the answer, i think it will help me get it of the ground.
Feb
12
comment How to have a character be nameless for the first few paragraphs of a book?
Thanks for the edit, it was kind of a jumble. I will be sure to read through those; I might have to just use a narrative or something to describe it. Anyway thanks for the help.
Feb
12
awarded  Editor
Feb
12
revised How to have a character be nameless for the first few paragraphs of a book?
edited body; edited title
Feb
12
asked How to have a character be nameless for the first few paragraphs of a book?