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Jul
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awarded  Curious
Mar
16
accepted Does this qualify as a prelude or prologue?
Mar
15
comment Does this qualify as a prelude or prologue?
Yea i just meant the hook would be in a different spot. Would that up there hook? Lead you to want to keep flipping pages? Assuming grammar and everything was taken care of.
Mar
15
comment Does this qualify as a prelude or prologue?
To answer your first question, Takira is the main character of the book. The story revolves around her and Thor entirely. As for your second, this would also serve as a slight reveal at the end. Doge serves as her mentor and the main villain, which that part could come later through a flash back i think. I actually have an idea for the spot it could go in too. As for Takira herself i'll give you one of her quotes. "Besides what do you think barbarian families do when they aren’t out raiding? Fighting and killing one another is just another Saturday afternoon…"
Mar
15
comment Does this qualify as a prelude or prologue?
I had heard that the prologue should pose a "super question" that the over all plot would answer. I assume it should also serve as the hook since it would take the place of the first chapter. I'm just not sure if this would perform that task or not.
Mar
15
asked Does this qualify as a prelude or prologue?
Feb
28
comment What type of writing would this fall under?
I have come to the conclusion that it is a "focused stream of consciousness." Where as (from what i read on wiki) the typical stream is bouncing all over the place. This one is steering the reader to one final conclusion.
Feb
28
accepted What type of writing would this fall under?
Feb
27
comment What type of writing would this fall under?
Also interesting. I had to google it and the example text they list sure sounds like my brain. Even if a magazine would never take it, at least I'm learning something out of it lol. Thanks for the answer Lauren, i might have to look into some magazines for it, whats the worst they could say? "Its not for us." Or maybe "Burn it!"
Feb
27
awarded  Commentator
Feb
27
comment What type of writing would this fall under?
Interesting, seems like i stumbled into something unique. Or maybe just something so grammatically wrong that its right. I am pretty sure that its in the second point of view. However the style seems to be what confuses me (and other people.)
Feb
27
asked What type of writing would this fall under?
Feb
20
accepted Flashback or dream as a means of hinting at more going on than meets the eye
Feb
19
comment Flashback or dream as a means of hinting at more going on than meets the eye
If i did put it in all italics would i keep thoughts in italics or put em in normal type? During it i have her think something about the guy she is with (her employer.) I like the italics idea though, that way there is no question its a dream, or what ever you would want to call it. Anyway once I'm done i will post it as a new question (i assume that's what i should do, sorry not entirely sure on this site) and see if it works out. Thanks for your input too by the way.
Feb
19
comment Flashback or dream as a means of hinting at more going on than meets the eye
Let me give you a short explanation of what i have in mind. Bare with me though, as i have a harder time explaining my ideas then i do just writing them. She is dreaming a memory, like say the last ten minutes. I would describe what she sees, burning homes, charred flesh and what not. I planned to have her shoot some one that was fleeing, then the person that she is with would turn on her and then things she hears in the real world would start to filter though. Thing this person says in the dream would actually be what she is hearing while she sleeps. Then as he attacks, she wakes up.
Feb
19
asked Flashback or dream as a means of hinting at more going on than meets the eye
Feb
16
accepted Am i using “he/she” too often during action scenes?
Feb
16
comment Am i using “he/she” too often during action scenes?
That is another of my issues, i feel like I'm using "Giants" far too often but I'm not really sure what else i could use. I read through the excerpt a good four times before i found the "one" you referred to... kind of made me laugh. Anyway thanks for the tips i will be sure change those around.
Feb
16
awarded  Custodian
Feb
16
reviewed Approve suggested edit on Am i using “he/she” too often during action scenes?