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I write and teach and run long distances and play a mediocre concertina.


Dec
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comment How many commas is too many?
This question is a tangle. Can you give an example of something you've overwrought with commas so we can offer some concrete feedback.
Dec
31
answered Is it a bad practice to occasionally add first-person narrative to third-person narrative?
Dec
31
comment How can I keep my characters' identities a mystery successfully?
There is a difference between outsmarting your readers and tricking them. You don't want to trick them.
Dec
31
comment Is it a bad practice to occasionally add first-person narrative to third-person narrative?
Strong analysis. I would disagree, though, about your edits to sentence one. The important thing isn't that Ruth disappears between the cars, but that Erin sees her disappear. This is an example of showing, showing that Erin is watching someone disappear from her, which is a lonely image.
Dec
31
answered What does a typical creative writing course look like?
Dec
26
comment Is it frustrating not to know the narrator's gender?
Consider Prodigy's video for "Smack My Bitch Up". What effect does it have on you?
Dec
26
comment Switching from past to present tense?
@Nick: This structure does not require that you begin in the heat of the climax, but just that you not begin at the beginning in order to establish conflict and character. Dostoyevsky's The Gambler is a good example of a 1st p. narrative that begins in medias res, at a moment near the climax, and provides a nice cliffhanger wherein the reader is wondering who the main character is and what mess he has gotten himself into. The denouement is withheld until the appropriate time, and the in medias res beginning makes us hunger for that moment.
Dec
25
comment Switching from past to present tense?
i'm offering a counter-perspective to OPs conflict. i don't know what the story is, but i think the in medias res structure is valid and has precedent, regardless of how television butchers it.
Dec
25
comment Switching from past to present tense?
sure, there are countless bad examples of a story that begins with someone dangling from a cliff edge and a narrator saying something like, "before we go any further, let me back up to last week, when this precarious position..." that's contrite, that's been done, but that's an issue of personal style and not a criticism of the form. the same could be said of dateline tags leading us through flashback sequences. i'm not going to go any further. i agree that it could be contrite, but so could anything done poorly...
Dec
25
comment Switching from past to present tense?
this technique is as old as storytelling. homer employed it, so did virgil, so did the norse epic singers. if it has been used contritely that is no fault of the technique. for that matter, comparing the tropes of television writing to novel writing is dangerous for precisely this reason. television is laden with contrived storytelling elements due to time constraints. an in medias res narrative structure doesn't have to begin just before the climax. the purpose, as i see it, is in creating early conflict. thus, homer begins the odyssey with odysseus on the brink of death. to be cont...
Dec
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answered Switching from past to present tense?
Dec
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revised Peeking through character's mask
added 1 characters in body
Dec
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answered Peeking through character's mask
Dec
22
comment Peeking through character's mask
Can you elucidate a little about who this narrator is? I am interested in why you haven't made your protagonist your narrator or at least allowed your narrator into your protagonist's head. I feel like I can't give a fair answer without knowing something of the relationship between narrator and protagonist.
Dec
22
accepted Characters with no names
Dec
19
comment Characters with no names
Don't give similar characters names that begin similarly to avoid confusion. I like that real well. I'm not sure what exactly you mean by "episodic" characters, though. Does this refer to characters who appear and then reappear after a lot of time has passed?
Dec
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reviewed No Action Needed How long should it take to write 100k words?
Dec
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reviewed Reviewed Do You Use Any Version Controlling Software/Methods As Writers?
Dec
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comment Do You Use Any Version Controlling Software/Methods As Writers?
Can you add a link here, so people can get to this software quickly.
Dec
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reviewed Reviewed For Fantasy Stories, Should You Include a Map At the Beginning of the Book?