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Jun
23
comment Is the following sentence structure allowed in fiction?
There was also a "she'll would" but you fixed it already :D
Jun
23
comment Is the following sentence structure allowed in fiction?
You freaked me out too with the first sentence :D May I just add that ellipses have a slightly different connotation. They turn the action down (or pause it), while dashes turn it up (or make a quick shift in action). For example, "But I though..." the speech trailed off, meaning that the character has stopped talking and went quiet (action dying out). "But I thought-" the speech was cut off abruptly by something or someone, causing some different action to follow. In this particular sentence, ellipses would suggest that she's sad, dashes would suggest that she's scared and distraught.
Jun
23
comment Is the following sentence structure allowed in fiction?
Definitely allowed, and appropriate in this case. Except, maybe, I'd rather use an en dash with spaces around it, but that's one of those things that's differently handled in different languages so I'm not sure what's the current rule in English (I saw a few debates about it but I don't know who won ;) ). And you might want to check out the sentence before that one, you have some mistakes in there :)
Jun
22
comment How to avoid repetition
This is not the type of repetition that's unwanted in fiction, such as "She said... She did... She stood up... She sat down...", this is repetition for the sake of clarity. Per dozen is not necessarily implied, and if you lose it you risk ambiguity. Also, it greatly depends what you write for. If it's fiction, then spicing it up might be good. But if it's a catalogue, price list or a manual, dry but clear might be better. With that said, I don't see why first sentence can't be "The price of this tablet is X and of that one is Y."
Jun
22
comment where would be a good place to find writers for my staff?
Check out this question: writers.stackexchange.com/questions/904/… Every place where writers gather would be good. May I ask what kind of work? Maybe some people around here would be interested.
Jun
21
comment How to write for cartoons?
I don't think it should be any different than writing a screenplay, but since I've never done either, I might be wrong. Or writing for comics.
Jun
21
answered What are good places to post your work where it will be read by others?
Jun
21
answered Why can't I write something longer than a few pages?
Jun
21
comment Separate paragraphs without line breaks
I've seen people use / or | to indicate line breaks in poetry, when people don't want to take up space with adding all the line breaks, but if they omit them it would ruin the poem.
Jun
20
comment Time measures in fantasy worlds
I'm not sure how much basis in reality it has, but in some comics I read, native Americans measured the passage of time by how long it takes to smoke a pipe - one pipe = 30 minutes. Two hours would be "four pipes ago". If your world is primitive enough and doesn't have constructs like hourglasses and such, a device like that might be a good solution - like Ave Maria you mentioned.
Jun
20
comment Why can't I write something longer than a few pages?
+1 for 1) suggestion :)
Jun
20
comment Why can't I write something longer than a few pages?
Tell me, do longer stories "come to you" as freely as short ones do? Or are you trying to force them?
Jun
20
answered Avoid blending Fantasy and Sci Fi
Jun
20
comment Avoid blending Fantasy and Sci Fi
Keep in mind that Sci-fi and Fantasy are not just the sum of it's parts (spaceships, robots and aliens for sci-fi and magic and dragons for fantasy). Sci-fi (the "classic" sci-fi of Asimov, Clarke, Dick...) is usually about development of the society as a whole (TNG is essentially about the almost utopian society Earth could evolve into, and the moral dilemmas such a society faces, plus their interaction with different alien societies they meet along the way) while fantasy usually focuses on the individual (a hero destined to defeat a great evil and save the world).
Jun
20
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Jun
19
comment Creative writing use and abuse
@SF.: Thanks, I didn't know the details behind it. It's hard to follow all he changes, and all the fighting about who's right and who isn't. I just concentrate on the obvious things, like spelling :D
Jun
19
comment Creative writing use and abuse
@LaurenIpsum: It's frightening how fast languages change. They're living things. Of course, that's a pain in the ass for all of us that are trying to write. So I've kind of given up on following the things that are on the border, like split infinitives and starting with conjunctions, I have enough troubles with spelling and proper tenses. No matter how much I proofread I can never catch all my mistakes. I do try to avoid splitting as well, and the conjunctions, but sometimes, they just sound right. Even if it is grammatically incorrect, we have the right to some artistic freedom, right?
Jun
19
comment What paragraph style should I use for an e-book?
@MonicaCellio: That's why I said, it all depends what's it for. Smashwords will reject it if it doesn't follow their style guide. Kindle has it's own formatting rules - for example, the first line is indented automatically, whether you want it or not. But if it's for his own, what's the proper term, distribution? If that's the case, he has the freedom to do what ever he wants, and indents + paragraph spaces may not be "correct", but might just be easiest on the reader.
Jun
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