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Photographer, musician and programmer.


Nov
25
comment How to indicate that a single letter was removed from a quotation
Without context, you could possibly write your quote as, "It it possible that God "desires all people to be saved," thus eliminating the need to drop the "s".
Nov
12
comment Show Don't Tell when Recounting Events
This should be a comment on the question, I think.
Nov
12
comment Show Don't Tell when Recounting Events
It's a bit like taking the phrase, "Actions speak louder than words," and using that in describing to the reader how Lana realised the guilt Terrence felt.
Nov
7
comment Am I using too much dialogue?
Since when is it advisable to keep dialogue to a "bare minimum". Dialogue is a major component of story writing.
Nov
6
comment Critque on how this sits as a prologue
I'm personally of the opinion that prologues are mostly unnecessary. Works such as Lord Of The Rings are such that a prologue might often be fascinating to the reader, granting more insight into the fascinating world, but for most stories, often the best way of developing your characters and intriguing your readers is by simply telling the story and unravelling the character throughout it.
Nov
6
comment In what order should I describe a setting?
Intriguing excerpt :)
Nov
6
comment In what order should I describe a setting?
I always try to root the environment building descriptions into the perspective of the character at hand. This is an example from a short story I wrote: Rays of golden sunlight filtered through the translucent, dry surface of a leaf, held aloft by the hand of a small girl. With eyes focused on the veins of the leaf, she spun it in her fingers as she lay on the soft, green grass under the oak tree in the backyard.
Nov
6
comment What does Character development actually mean?
The most effective character development is that which is shown, not told, in my opinion (and hopefully in general). The Han and Greedo scene mentioned above is a good example of this. You learn a great deal about Han Solo through this scene. He's in debt, he's on the run, and he cares for little but himself (or so he thought...). Characters can often be developed on the fly, as if you are learning the character as you write your story. For some characters you may need only start with little more than a single sentence and everything else can be improvised from that.
Oct
22
comment Can I be a good writer without reading a lot?
As a photographer, I find it immensely valuable to see others' photographs and work out how they were made. It gives me guidance on how I perceive my own progress and skill, and how I may improve. Not only that, it inspires me to keep photographing and also try new things. Writing isn't, and shouldn't be, any different.
Oct
22
comment How many pages long should a chapter book be?
This feels awfully familiar.. Except it's only 5 pages at a time! :-/
Oct
16
comment Are the following passages examples of tense change? Are they allowed in fiction writing?
@Philipp agreed. I would emphasise it by rewording it. "Plus**,** it had everything we needed**;** a basic table, a bathroom, but to my dismay, only one bed." Express emotions through words, not type effects.
Oct
15
comment Improving the flow/rhythm of the following comparison
Just a side note, I would change the 2nd/3rd sentence to be: "I was beginning to like her more. I also realized we had some things in common, like our attempts of suicide." "Like" should be part of the previous sentence.
Oct
14
comment How does the 10,000 hour rule apply to writing?
The key to mastering anything is knowing how to improve, learning from mistakes and seeking out knowledge from those people who are great at what they do. Putting in time is only part of the equation.
Oct
12
comment How do you effectively develop a plot when you have a proper back story?
While a science fiction story wouldn't be complete without world/history building aspects, rooting those parts in the perspective of the protagonist and other characters will help to make it believable. If you think about it, your character is probably not going to notice things the same way we would if we were thrown into a futuristic city or landing on a desert planet. Star Wars is an obvious example, and Serenity/Firefly did arguably as well in this respect, if not more due to its Earth based history. I find these are the most relatable and successful depictions of science fiction stories.
May
8
comment Potential confusion: referring to home planet as “Earth”
Thanks for the extra cent :)
May
20
comment Vision/dream as an effective opening?
Thanks. I can see why it doesn't work well, despite the roughness of my post's version. I think if I'm going to do this vision (given to him by this alien), it has to be connected to what he's doing. Perhaps it's a few pages in that it actually happens, and as a result he ends up in a hospital for apparently passing out, or something.
May
20
comment Vision/dream as an effective opening?
The passage was rushed and a little unthought out, I'll admit. I agree, it needs context, and it also needs a lot of work in itself. Perhaps he's "on the job" (whatever that may be) and the vision happens, interrupting him that has repercussions, only for it to happen again later.
May
20
comment Vision/dream as an effective opening?
Admittedly it was a rushed attempt, but I see your point about putting the vision in context, not to mention some inconsistent elements.
May
19
comment Designing a book
Paint.NET is not exactly the best tool for creating books.
Apr
15
comment Potential confusion: referring to home planet as “Earth”
Thanks Malvolio. It is first draft material, but I do see how the your suggestion on how to describe such things flows better. While I didn't initially ask for critique per se, anything you can, please do! New writer here.