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May
20
comment Vision/dream as an effective opening?
Admittedly it was a rushed attempt, but I see your point about putting the vision in context, not to mention some inconsistent elements.
May
20
asked Vision/dream as an effective opening?
May
19
comment Designing a book
Paint.NET is not exactly the best tool for creating books.
Apr
15
comment Potential confusion: referring to home planet as “Earth”
Thanks Malvolio. It is first draft material, but I do see how the your suggestion on how to describe such things flows better. While I didn't initially ask for critique per se, anything you can, please do! New writer here.
Apr
15
answered Indirect Narration Style
Apr
15
comment Indirect Narration Style
It was pretty clear to me that this is about writing...
Apr
14
comment Potential confusion: referring to home planet as “Earth”
The constellation in which Messier 33 (the real galaxy) is located is Triangulum. An early name of the constellation was Sicilia, because Ceres, patron goddess of Sicily, was claimed to have begged Jupiter that the island be placed in the heavens. en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Triangulum
Apr
13
comment Tools for science-based world building?
Big +1 right there. I think the best way is to carve the surroundings out of your character's experiences. Is it cold? Just say "It was cold, a frosty bite to the morning air." rather than, "It was a cold climate. The land masses to the east caused low pressure systems to bring dry cold air from the east, precipating snow and freezing water into ice during the planet's Winter." BORING.
Apr
13
comment Tools for science-based world building?
I think there is also the point that your characters may not know about weather system. It may "snowy, but warm further north" and that's all the reader may care to know.
Apr
13
comment Tools for science-based world building?
Carve the surroundings around the story you are telling, though this "scientifically valid" information may be handy.
Apr
13
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Apr
13
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Update on the problem
Apr
13
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Apr
13
comment Potential confusion: referring to home planet as “Earth”
Thanks Craig. I used one of the Latin words for "new" to name this newly discovered planet. I may expand a little more on their relation. Solum is the word for "ground", "land", "earth" even. For the colonisers, it's significant, and maybe I should briefly explain why it was called Solum, (in reverance to Earth).
Apr
13
comment Potential confusion: referring to home planet as “Earth”
They have lobster :) P.S. Can you guess where the name comes from?
Apr
13
comment Potential confusion: referring to home planet as “Earth”
Thanks. I think the general idea with how I'm setting up my "future" is that the humans still have a natural tie to their original planet, even if most don't ever visit it. Perhaps the issues we face today had been overcome and it's now a intergalactic "core" planet. But as far as naming this New Earth goes, I've been convinced to go with what is in my updated passage for now.
Apr
13
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Apr
13
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Apr
13
comment Potential confusion: referring to home planet as “Earth”
Thanks Dale. Usually when I go back I find these "info dumps" and try to see if I can fit them in like you said.
Apr
13
comment Potential confusion: referring to home planet as “Earth”
Well I decided some Latin wouldn't go down too bad and changed it "Solum". Fits a lot better.