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comment Potential confusion: referring to home planet as “Earth”
Thanks for the extra cent :)
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May
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revised Vision/dream as an effective opening?
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May
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accepted Vision/dream as an effective opening?
May
20
comment Vision/dream as an effective opening?
Thanks. I can see why it doesn't work well, despite the roughness of my post's version. I think if I'm going to do this vision (given to him by this alien), it has to be connected to what he's doing. Perhaps it's a few pages in that it actually happens, and as a result he ends up in a hospital for apparently passing out, or something.
May
20
comment Vision/dream as an effective opening?
The passage was rushed and a little unthought out, I'll admit. I agree, it needs context, and it also needs a lot of work in itself. Perhaps he's "on the job" (whatever that may be) and the vision happens, interrupting him that has repercussions, only for it to happen again later.
May
20
comment Vision/dream as an effective opening?
Admittedly it was a rushed attempt, but I see your point about putting the vision in context, not to mention some inconsistent elements.
May
20
asked Vision/dream as an effective opening?
May
19
comment Designing a book
Paint.NET is not exactly the best tool for creating books.
Apr
15
comment Potential confusion: referring to home planet as “Earth”
Thanks Malvolio. It is first draft material, but I do see how the your suggestion on how to describe such things flows better. While I didn't initially ask for critique per se, anything you can, please do! New writer here.
Apr
15
answered Indirect Narration Style
Apr
15
comment Indirect Narration Style
It was pretty clear to me that this is about writing...
Apr
14
comment Potential confusion: referring to home planet as “Earth”
The constellation in which Messier 33 (the real galaxy) is located is Triangulum. An early name of the constellation was Sicilia, because Ceres, patron goddess of Sicily, was claimed to have begged Jupiter that the island be placed in the heavens. en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Triangulum
Apr
13
comment Tools for science-based world building?
Big +1 right there. I think the best way is to carve the surroundings out of your character's experiences. Is it cold? Just say "It was cold, a frosty bite to the morning air." rather than, "It was a cold climate. The land masses to the east caused low pressure systems to bring dry cold air from the east, precipating snow and freezing water into ice during the planet's Winter." BORING.
Apr
13
comment Tools for science-based world building?
I think there is also the point that your characters may not know about weather system. It may "snowy, but warm further north" and that's all the reader may care to know.
Apr
13
comment Tools for science-based world building?
Carve the surroundings around the story you are telling, though this "scientifically valid" information may be handy.
Apr
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revised Potential confusion: referring to home planet as “Earth”
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revised Potential confusion: referring to home planet as “Earth”
Update on the problem