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25+ years in software development.

6 years on an HCI PhD.

20+ years married.

19 years a parent.

I can cope with anything.

Check out my short story


Jun
22
answered How do you determine if a plot device is too coincidental?
Jun
22
revised Does my story beginning hook the reader? (dialogue + narration)?
added 404 characters in body
Jun
22
comment Does my story beginning hook the reader? (dialogue + narration)?
@M.Na'el - actually I agree with this. Ruth may have said "a four three they said". And she probably said "nine-ish" as well, harder to use numbers for that.
Jun
20
comment Does my story beginning hook the reader? (dialogue + narration)?
Always remember that in normal speech, there is a lot of unspoken context, and a lot of abbreviation, and it doesn't make complete sense. If you can get that down, the reader will have to interpret the rest of the story to understand it.
Jun
20
answered Does my story beginning hook the reader? (dialogue + narration)?
Jun
20
answered What sections of the frontmatter are listed in the table of contents?
Jun
18
comment A tricky serial semi-colon
@justkt - I think it falls between the two somewhat. It is about the appropriate way of writing this - a writing style question - while the focus is on a punctuation mark - a punctuation question. If we treat it as writing style "how can I show this list correctly and clearly", not what the rules strictly say, it works better here. For an answer about "what do the rules say we should do", EL&U would be better
Jun
18
answered Some doubts on the use of Italicized words
Jun
18
comment My first act is lengthy. And I cannot shorten it. Any Suggestions?
And, as another example, Stephen Lawheads Byzantium (I think) was a bit of a slog, and a build up until the very last page. An awesome conclusion, but a long way to get there. Use the rules as a guide.
Jun
18
answered How do I stick to one story?
Jun
15
answered Proper attribution of copyrighted lyrics in a story
Jun
15
awarded  Fanatic
Jun
13
comment Is it possible that my short novel will be boring to my readers because it only has two characters and the location doesn't change?
"Waiting for Godot" has 2 characters, one scene, and very little action. It is also an exceptionally good play. It can be done, and can be phenomenal when it works.
Jun
13
comment How to improve the ending of this short story (final scene + flashback)
The problem is, I have tried to answer one of the questions. But the other two would require a lot more, and would make a single answer very long and disconnected. The questions are OK, but maybe making one question the main one, and the others subsiduary ones, for comment, would improve it. Or the flashbacks question could be entirely separate.
Jun
13
answered How to improve the ending of this short story (final scene + flashback)
Jun
12
answered Opening paragraphs of a short story set in an aquarium
Jun
11
answered Are these fictional musings convincing or overwrought?
Jun
6
answered Is it a bad idea to linger too long on a first draft?
Jun
5
answered Legal ramifications for writing about fictional relationships with celebs
Jun
1
answered Is there a quick way to know I have created a Mary Sue?