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revised “Lacking meat”, “Content-free”, and poor defense-development. Please critique my work
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May
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comment Title Choice: “The Girl [Without/Who Didn't Have] A Soul”
+1 for pointing out "didn't have" is past tense and "without" is present tense
May
2
answered My story portrays a process, not a conflict - how do I make the process my focus?
Apr
28
comment How do I organize a massive collection of personal files and writing?
@marienbad I did mean it for your existing notes. What you do is copy/paste each separate bit of data out of a file and into the right spot (which is defined by you) in OneNote. Once everything is out of the file, you delete it, and move on to the next one. I admit my answer wasn't obvious in how you could use OneNote for your notes. I've edited my answer quite a bit to do just that, so please do take another look at it.
Apr
28
revised How do I organize a massive collection of personal files and writing?
Edit to expand and highlight where this answer is relevant to the question
Apr
24
answered How do I organize a massive collection of personal files and writing?
Apr
24
revised “Lacking meat”, “Content-free”, and poor defense-development. Please critique my work
added 27 characters in body
Apr
24
comment “Lacking meat”, “Content-free”, and poor defense-development. Please critique my work
Also it's worth mentioning I do like your "voice" in your writing. Take care, as you go through this process of editing, that you preserve and foster that voice. A great voice can cover many writing sins, and more importantly, is what draws people to your work. So don't kill it.
Apr
24
comment “Lacking meat”, “Content-free”, and poor defense-development. Please critique my work
For what it's worth, the article did make more sense to me the more I (re)read it, and oddly, I liked it better on your blog. Something about the formatting/fonts/background made it easier to read, I think. Point is, this critique is based on my impressions from the first pass. With your most readers, you only get that one shot.
Apr
24
comment “Lacking meat”, “Content-free”, and poor defense-development. Please critique my work
Incidentally, you can't skip past the ads on hulu.
Apr
24
answered “Lacking meat”, “Content-free”, and poor defense-development. Please critique my work
Apr
16
comment Is it a bad idea to have all the action in the beginning and all the dialogue in the end?
@alexchenco "... story is really about the in existence of the soul." Gee, ya think? You fairly well bludgeon people about the head with it. This is an underlying problem with the story - you have a message, and the story is sacrificed to it. This is a common problem in religious fiction like this. When an author comes into the story with a preexisting conclusion, and the reason for the story is spreading that conclusion, what's often not understood (by the author) is that a conclusion is an end -- and what's missing from the story is the journey to that end.
Apr
16
comment Tips for describing features of unusual place that I often visit
@KoenVanDamme +1 for using other senses. Frequently, if you analyse a descriptive scene that sticks in your head, you'll find senses besides sight used. For me, smell seems to be a sense that really makes a scene stand out.
Apr
15
answered Tips for describing features of unusual place that I often visit
Apr
11
comment A rhyming dictionary worth bookmarking online or purchasing?
the kind where it's pronounced "what what", lol.
Apr
11
answered How do you find your unique style?
Apr
11
comment How can I catch more errors when I proofread?
Especially good if you put it down for a while, a couple weeks perhaps, then pick it up and read it to someone. That gives your brain time to clear out the auto-insert cache so you stumble over a missing word rather than speaking it anyway.
Apr
5
comment What should be put on scene notecards? (for novel writing)
+1 for "note my goals...". That plays well with the direction nathan lawrence's answer just sent my mind in.
Apr
5
comment What should be put on scene notecards? (for novel writing)
I'm really intrigued by your #3, "Why they're there" and #4, "How this affects the characters and the story" (and @Aerovistae 's excellent expansion on it). I'd usually have #1 & #3, but really, that's just factual information I already know... making myself explain why the scene's there and how it plays in the story arc may be just what I was missing. I think I'll go do some navel gazing on it and try couple of test cards on my current story.
Apr
5
comment What should be put on scene notecards? (for novel writing)
@NeilFein no, not offhand. This was several years ago, so they're buried somewhere in a box or something. I'll have a look, but I don't know if I'll find them. Basically though, what I'm looking for is toward the Best Practices end of things for the next novel, not trying to salvage that one (it needs a total, ground up rewrite to even think of being good :-) )