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This 'about me' will probably be updated when I have the time to edit every site-profile manually, and when I can be more active on the network.

Till then, this remains a placeholder account with all of my previous questions, comments, and whatever else is tied to my alias on SE.

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Dec
26
comment Do these starting paragraphs make you want to keep reading?
That's very thorough! I had some questions, objections, etc… But I really need to go now and I could only upload another version I hope is better… Please read and comment again here; if I didn't add a comment with my questions, etc… before then! Thanks a lot.
Dec
26
revised Do these starting paragraphs make you want to keep reading?
Following advice
Dec
22
revised Is emphasizing a point by underlining still appropriate?
Title edit
Dec
22
suggested suggested edit on Is emphasizing a point by underlining still appropriate?
Dec
21
revised Do these starting paragraphs make you want to keep reading?
added 52 characters in body
Dec
21
revised Do these starting paragraphs make you want to keep reading?
added 47 characters in body
Dec
21
comment Do these starting paragraphs make you want to keep reading?
@justkt - The first "these" link mentions (Does this paragraph make you want to keep reading?" So?
Dec
21
revised Do these starting paragraphs make you want to keep reading?
added 338 characters in body; edited tags; edited title
Dec
21
revised Do these starting paragraphs make you want to keep reading?
added 338 characters in body; edited tags; edited title
Dec
20
revised Do these starting paragraphs make you want to keep reading?
Edited Body.
Dec
20
comment Do these starting paragraphs make you want to keep reading?
Sorry, but I can't really find the guidelines for a 'critique request.' My impression was that if something was read, and people said their opinion of it, that's criticizing... Pretty much, those 1100 words should get the reader into the story, hopefully with line getting him to the next.
Dec
20
revised Do these starting paragraphs make you want to keep reading?
Edited Body.
Dec
19
revised Do these starting paragraphs make you want to keep reading?
Edited the title.
Dec
19
asked Do these starting paragraphs make you want to keep reading?
Dec
1
comment Does this beginning hook the reader?
That's the problem; I only write, I don't analyze it that way... I understand that as I get used to it, I won't have to and that you ask this only because up until now, I don't seem to have that objective... To clear things up, I'll post another question, about the same thing in the same story; but I'll give myself more time first, until I find a beginning that'd attract me even if I didn't know the story ahead. Wow! I really blubbered!
Dec
1
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Dec
1
comment Does this beginning hook the reader?
I guess that settles it... I've been reading about writing novels, reading novels, trying to get it right... While my science is solid and the plot is as unique as my mind tells me, it just needs more time. Looks like the teenager Hugo is out this time. -- I won't do any more edits; but if anyone have anything to add, I'll continue discussion in comments...
Dec
1
comment Does this beginning hook the reader?
It only says that that's it for now, ie. everything there is to know about the characters will be dealt with in small doses as the story progresses until this point, around the end of act 2. That's not to say the first 2 acts have no story, they have the main plot that gets to this point and... it's complicated... Could you give more examples of turns of phrases you didn't like in the narrative? Anyway, have you looked at the body text again? Also see my third comment on the body text; see if you can help.
Dec
1
comment Does this beginning hook the reader?
I still have the first version I'd sent; I could upload it again and post the updated versions from hereon in a separate answer (just one answer updated each time as per suggestions). Could this work? Or does editing answers bump the question too? I think these questions (about editing, that is) should have been covered in the FAQ somehow...
Nov
30
revised Does this beginning hook the reader?
edited tags