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comment controversial rape subject in mainstream novel?
Why not write it and find out?
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answered How rough should a rough draft be
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comment How rough should a rough draft be
What happens (in the text or in your head) that makes you want to edit?
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comment My story passes in choppy blocks - how can I fix it?
It's just a rule of thumb ;-) If the character satisfies the scene goal, see if you can make things worse with respect to some larger goal. Maybe: Out of the frying pan into the fire. As when Indiana Jones's bag of sand trick "works," but triggers the boulder trap. Or: The way out requires sacrificing something crucial to the larger goal. Or: Getting out ticks away precious time. Or: Escaping makes the bad guy redouble his efforts.
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comment My story passes in choppy blocks - how can I fix it?
A useful rule of thumb for commercial fiction: The character must fail, and the failure must get worse. And if the character happens to succeed, or appears to succeed, we soon learn that "succeeding" actually made things worse. But it's just a rule of thumb, not a law. I hadn't thought about the possibility that a success might lead to a dilemma. Seems like a fruitful approach.
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revised My story passes in choppy blocks - how can I fix it?
Add descriptions of Scene and Sequel
Jun
29
answered My story passes in choppy blocks - how can I fix it?
Jun
29
comment in years that vs. in years when
This feels like more of an English language question than a writing question. Perhaps someone who knows how to migrate it will do that. Myself, I would go with "years in which."
Jun
29
revised Formatting to show system errors in fiction?
added 214 characters in body
Jun
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revised Formatting to show system errors in fiction?
added 21 characters in body
Jun
28
answered Formatting to show system errors in fiction?
Jun
28
answered technical subjects - non-fiction vs fiction
Jun
28
answered Synonym for 'overly obvious'?
Jun
27
comment How to improve logic/reduce plot holes?
advancedfictionwriting.com/articles/snowflake-method
Jun
27
comment Manuscript format: Straight or curly quotation marks?
William Shunn replied, "My recommendation today would be to use smart quotes (curly quotes)." He intends to update his format guide "soon." He also says, "The fact is, anything you can do in your manuscript (which will almost certainly be delivered electronically) that makes life easier for the typesetter or book designer is probably going to be welcomed. So, if no one needs to go through your document and convert the straight quotes to curly quotes, that's going to be a good thing for all involved."
Jun
27
answered How to improve logic/reduce plot holes?
Jun
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comment How to improve logic/reduce plot holes?
Isaac Asimov worked that way, though he omitted step 4. Robert Heinlein also omitted steps 2 and 3.
Jun
25
comment Manuscript format: Straight or curly quotation marks?
Vonda replied that she put her article into PDF "because the formatting is preserved in PDF." She also says: (1) the details that matter to the editor are "a good story, style, voice, and a grasp of the tools of your profession: grammar, punctuation, syntax," (2) "look at the market's website for their guidelines and follow them slavishly," and finally (3) "Auntie Vonda's unsolicited advice: Concentrate on the story."
Jun
25
comment Should I completely eliminate passive voice
Isn't the focus on the subject in both of your example sentences--John in the first, and Bob in the second?
Jun
25
comment Manuscript format: Straight or curly quotation marks?
@what I'm confident, given that those authors posted their guidelines on their own web sites, that they intended the typography to be exemplary. Confident, but not certain. So I'll ask them.