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I write fantasy, science fiction, and mystery stories.

See my dalewriting and dalefiction blogs.


May
6
answered How to format dialogue with an embedded long monologue
May
6
reviewed Reject suggested edit on Does writing in a certain mood change how a writer writes?
May
5
answered Writing style — comma, period and re-referring the object of the first sentence again as subject in second sentence
Apr
25
reviewed Approve suggested edit on Using a world created by someone else for your own fiction
Apr
23
comment Critique: Make excerpt more visual/flow better
In general, if we're in a character's head, we don't have to say "he sees." We can just describe things in a visual way, and the reader will know it's coming from what the character sees. And sometimes you can drop "he looked." The reader can usually figure out that if the character sees something, he's looking at it. But sometimes you have to make him look.
Apr
23
comment Critique: Make excerpt more visual/flow better
If we've established that he is not looking at her, we'll have to get him to look at her first. An easy way: "Peter turned. Ariett was pointing..."
Apr
23
answered Critique: Make excerpt more visual/flow better
Apr
18
comment Best practice for stories based on other writers' stories
If your story uses recognizable elements of someone else's fiction, trademark laws may apply. en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Legal_issues_with_fan_fiction Consult a lawyer before publishing.
Apr
16
answered Improving techniques independently: Description
Apr
15
answered Does DRM affect copyright or the restrictions on distribution by the author?
Apr
12
reviewed Approve suggested edit on I'm getting tired of “he said” “she said” in dialogue; how do I get around it?
Apr
11
answered Hooking the reader by omitting a piece of information
Apr
9
answered 1st person story, but the main character will die in the end and some of the story needs to be told after his death. How to solve this problem?
Apr
8
reviewed Approve suggested edit on How can I translate my poems in English that it doesn't sound odd/non poetic for English speaker audiences?
Apr
8
answered Is it unusual for a flashback to have a very long dialogue?
Apr
6
reviewed Reject suggested edit on Is there a name for this kind of sentence structure?
Apr
2
answered Ways to speed up my writing to 15 - 20 pages a day
Mar
27
answered Is it acceptable practice to use contractions in a fictional first person narrative for children?
Mar
12
reviewed Approve suggested edit on UK laws broken by piracy of novels
Mar
2
reviewed Reject suggested edit on Can a book be written without an antagonist?