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I write non-fiction about leadership, software development, testing, and resistance to change.

I also write fiction (primarily the beginnings and middles of yet-to-be-finished novels) in a variety of speculative genres.

I also write about writing.


Apr
11
answered What would sections of a book that are larger than a chapter be called?
Apr
9
answered How to write polite deadline email?
Apr
3
answered What should be put on scene notecards? (for novel writing)
Mar
30
answered Floating vs Float
Mar
15
answered Need help to rephrase this sentence to prevent a run-on
Mar
7
awarded  Nice Answer
Feb
28
awarded  Enlightened
Feb
28
awarded  Nice Answer
Feb
26
comment How can I make this essay more succinct?
The two examples of "passive voice" that you mention are not passive voice. Passive voice means that the subject is the recipient of the action. That is not the case in either example. I do agree that helping verbs (and "to be" in general, even mine in this comment) leave sentences kinda wimpy, and that strengthening the main verb usually improves a sentence. And I agree with your advice in all of your examples.
Feb
25
answered Citing Myself As a Source
Feb
20
answered A friendlier way to write charges or fees to clients?
Feb
20
answered File specifications for HTML folder --> Kindle?
Feb
19
answered What are the advantages to setting a word limit for a short story?
Jan
27
answered How can I revise these sentences to be more correct while still keeping the effect?
Jan
21
answered A tricky sentence to construct
Jan
20
answered Software for instructional book
Jan
4
comment What software can handle both revision control and layout?
Start with the Wikipedia entries for TeX, LaTeX, DocBook, and Markdown. Markdown is the simplest. You already know some of it. StackExchange uses markdown syntax in posts (for bold, italics, block quotes, lists, probably some other stuff). DocBook is XML-based. TeX (and the related LaTEx) are completely their own thing, quite complex and powerful. Wikipedia nicely describes each, and links to official pages. One thing I like about markup is that I can break sentences across lines of text. That makes it easier to move phrases around during editing. It also plays nicely with version control.
Jan
3
answered What software can handle both revision control and layout?
Dec
31
answered How do you connect a non sequitur hook to a novel?
Dec
26
awarded  Good Answer