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I write fantasy, science fiction, and mystery stories.

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Feb
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comment How can I make this essay more succinct?
The two examples of "passive voice" that you mention are not passive voice. Passive voice means that the subject is the recipient of the action. That is not the case in either example. I do agree that helping verbs (and "to be" in general, even mine in this comment) leave sentences kinda wimpy, and that strengthening the main verb usually improves a sentence. And I agree with your advice in all of your examples.
Feb
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answered Citing Myself As a Source
Feb
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answered A friendlier way to write charges or fees to clients?
Feb
20
answered File specifications for HTML folder --> Kindle?
Feb
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answered What are the advantages to setting a word limit for a short story?
Jan
27
answered How can I revise these sentences to be more correct while still keeping the effect?
Jan
21
answered A tricky sentence to construct
Jan
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answered Software for instructional book
Jan
4
comment What software can handle both revision control and layout?
Start with the Wikipedia entries for TeX, LaTeX, DocBook, and Markdown. Markdown is the simplest. You already know some of it. StackExchange uses markdown syntax in posts (for bold, italics, block quotes, lists, probably some other stuff). DocBook is XML-based. TeX (and the related LaTEx) are completely their own thing, quite complex and powerful. Wikipedia nicely describes each, and links to official pages. One thing I like about markup is that I can break sentences across lines of text. That makes it easier to move phrases around during editing. It also plays nicely with version control.
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answered What software can handle both revision control and layout?
Dec
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answered How do you connect a non sequitur hook to a novel?
Dec
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awarded  Good Answer
Dec
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answered Clarity: What supports it? What hinders it?
Dec
22
reviewed Approve suggested edit on Is emphasizing a point by underlining still appropriate?
Dec
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answered Replacing actually with a more formal alternative
Dec
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answered Interesting and easier-to-read alternatives to the scientific academic article
Dec
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awarded  Yearling
Nov
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answered Risk Assessment in Technical Standards Documentation
Nov
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answered How do I imitate the simplicity of a typical student's writing?
Nov
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answered Logical conclusions of deduction