Yamikuronue

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bio	website	crossingsrp.no-ip.org
	location	Akron, OH
	age	25
visits	member for	1 year, 7 months
	seen	May 7 at 11:35
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I've recently completed my MSc Computer Science from a UK institution, and have moved back to the US to begin work. I write in my spare time, enjoy cooking, and apparently am addicted to signing up for SE sites :).

	490 reputation	bio	website	crossingsrp.no-ip.org	visits	member for	1 year, 7 months
112 badges		location	Akron, OH		seen	May 7 at 11:35

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May 4	comment	Software for collaborative writing for a small team Already suggested twice (in a comment and in an answer), and it doesn't fit all my criteria. I do use google docs regularly, but I'm looking for an integrated project management solution
Jan 30	comment	Why shouldn't I use a pen name? As I said in the question (over a year ago), I'm not ashamed of my work, I'm ashamed of/embarrassed by my given name. -1 for false assumptions.
Jan 23	comment	Do the characters in the following dialogue sound the same? It's not what you asked, but Icaro's first line seems significantly more formal to me than the rest of the passage. At first I expected this to be one rather formal character and one rather informal, so it surprised me when Icaro said "like" mid-sentence.
Jan 23	comment	Software for collaborative writing for a small team Because our company uses an enterprisey system we can't afford. Trello looks significantly more polished than the previous tools I'd looked at, though, so that might be worth experimenting with :D
Jan 23	comment	Software for collaborative writing for a small team @SF Yeah, we're both programmers by day and want something like we're used to using at work to keep organized.
Jan 30	comment	How can I revise these sentences to be more correct while still keeping the effect? @PeteWilson Sure, but it sounded wrong to my ear, discordant somehow.
Dec 20	comment	Do these starting paragraphs make you want to keep reading? This really isn't the site for writing games such as this one. If you edit it to a basic critique request you'll probably get feedback.
Dec 5	comment	How to associate my screenname with my books? But won't I then run into the problem of Yamikuronue not sounding like a name? I'm writing fiction.
Nov 11	comment	How can I accurately represent young adult dialogue? Just be careful not to get arrested - many people are uncomfortable with the idea of adults following teenagers around to listen to their conversations, for obvious reasons.
Nov 2	comment	Should a flashback be in past tense or past perfect? I was planning to alternate past and present sections for a good chunk of the book, so I think italics will be more annoying than helpful.
Nov 1	comment	Should a flashback be in past tense or past perfect? What if I don't use italics? Or do you reccomend always doing so?
Nov 1	comment	Does this snippet meander too much? I suppose the real issue is I don't really have one. These would be placed in the context of a larger story, such as "Lance's divorce and subsequent custody battle for his son leads to the realization that his family is far more important to him than he imagined" or "His son's divorce drives Gregory to close a decades-long rift in his family through a cross-country road trip". What I'm looking for with the critiques is advice I can keep in mind when revising actual stories I've done - I'm playing up faults I'm concerned about to get an idea for a balance between extremes.
Oct 28	comment	Does this snippet meander too much? Thanks, that's more or less what I was looking for. I've gone way too far the opposite direction as my last snippit. I'm just not sure how I can put even half the characterization into a dialogue that I can when I include introspection... I'll work on it with more practice, proabably during nano.
Oct 28	comment	Does this snippet meander too much? I added a couple clarifications: "Looking at his son" => "Looking at his son, Lance," and "His twin brother" => "His twin brother Obsidian". Does that help?
Oct 27	comment	Does this snippet meander too much? Yeesh, did I muddle that up badly? Gregory and Obsidian are twins. Lance is Gregory's son. The names are because I'm using a handful of my favorite sci-fi characters and just grabbed the first normal-ish name I could think of beginning with the right letter to make it less sci-fi. I'm just doing these for practice before editing my novella, so I didn't spend nearly as much time on character naming as I normally would.
Oct 27	comment	Resume Preamble: Sounds wrong @KorvinSzanto Even with a customized resume, you usually send a cover letter. What exactly are you sending? A google search reveals a "preamble" in LaTEX for a CV or resume refers to the portion where you detail your contact information, not a written paragraph; that's the only relevant information I'm seeing.
Oct 26	comment	Is this excerpt's style too matter-of-fact? I put "even" because she was the one most likely to attempt to deny it, given she has the most stake in it. If she has to admit it, then any third party can't really argue. Is that not the best way to show that?
Oct 26	comment	Is this excerpt's style too matter-of-fact? I definitely agree with you on "gruff" being poor choice of words, sarcastic as you are about it. The question becomes how to really show the uncle's character without making the already long snippit even longer? I thought I could do it with the facial description, after you already care since you know he's in the story now. Other ideas?
Oct 26	comment	Is this excerpt's style too matter-of-fact? yeah, I wasn't sure what to put though. That look better?
Oct 19	comment	Why shouldn't I use a pen name? @Standback It occurs to me that some of the most famous pennames were male names used for female authors. If they can disguise their gender, I'd think I could manage to disguise my race until I'm ready to reveal my real name.