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Jan
27
revised How can I revise these sentences to be more correct while still keeping the effect?
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Jan
27
accepted How can I revise these sentences to be more correct while still keeping the effect?
Jan
27
asked How can I revise these sentences to be more correct while still keeping the effect?
Dec
20
comment Do these starting paragraphs make you want to keep reading?
This really isn't the site for writing games such as this one. If you edit it to a basic critique request you'll probably get feedback.
Dec
7
accepted How to associate my screenname with my books?
Dec
5
comment How to associate my screenname with my books?
But won't I then run into the problem of Yamikuronue not sounding like a name? I'm writing fiction.
Dec
5
asked How to associate my screenname with my books?
Nov
16
accepted Use of present-tense for memory-related shenanigans in a past-tense story
Nov
11
accepted How to juggle work and NaNoWriMo?
Nov
11
comment How can I accurately represent young adult dialogue?
Just be careful not to get arrested - many people are uncomfortable with the idea of adults following teenagers around to listen to their conversations, for obvious reasons.
Nov
11
asked Use of present-tense for memory-related shenanigans in a past-tense story
Nov
2
comment Should a flashback be in past tense or past perfect?
I was planning to alternate past and present sections for a good chunk of the book, so I think italics will be more annoying than helpful.
Nov
2
accepted Should a flashback be in past tense or past perfect?
Nov
1
comment Should a flashback be in past tense or past perfect?
What if I don't use italics? Or do you reccomend always doing so?
Nov
1
comment Does this snippet meander too much?
I suppose the real issue is I don't really have one. These would be placed in the context of a larger story, such as "Lance's divorce and subsequent custody battle for his son leads to the realization that his family is far more important to him than he imagined" or "His son's divorce drives Gregory to close a decades-long rift in his family through a cross-country road trip". What I'm looking for with the critiques is advice I can keep in mind when revising actual stories I've done - I'm playing up faults I'm concerned about to get an idea for a balance between extremes.
Nov
1
asked Should a flashback be in past tense or past perfect?
Oct
31
answered The opposite sex in first person?
Oct
29
awarded  Quorum
Oct
28
accepted Should a novella have chapters?
Oct
28
comment Does this snippet meander too much?
Thanks, that's more or less what I was looking for. I've gone way too far the opposite direction as my last snippit. I'm just not sure how I can put even half the characterization into a dialogue that I can when I include introspection... I'll work on it with more practice, proabably during nano.