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Business systems analyst.


Feb
10
comment Does excessive use of prepositions make writing unclear?
"The benefit...has many benefits."
Feb
10
comment Is the following passage confusing?
I didn't go to art school, but I knew this from physics. I thought it made a nice metaphor too. I wasn't sure what it was a metaphor for, but it felt like one, so it would cause me to look for that theme in the story.
Feb
10
comment Is the following passage confusing?
This was my difficulty reading the passage too. I am an engineer, so I was wanting to explain it to him while reading about his musings.
Jan
15
comment Is there a great manual for technical and scientific writing?
We have a couple of technical writers who are regulars in our chat room, if you are interested in socializing about that kind of work. (You'll need 20 rep to chat.)
Jan
9
comment Does this opening somewhat grip the reader?
That's a complex question. You might enjoy dropping by the chat room to discuss it. We have a regular chat on Tuesdays, and people are there other times too.
Jan
8
revised Does this opening somewhat grip the reader?
Formatted section of writing
Jan
8
comment Does this opening somewhat grip the reader?
I think this is heaps better than the first sample. The only thing that I immediately noticed was that he wouldn't describe his sister like that unless he was attracted to her, which is icky.
Jan
8
suggested suggested edit on Does this opening somewhat grip the reader?
Jan
6
answered Does this entice the reader to continue?
Jan
3
comment How do I write a proper cover letter
Also, I would add that you should repeat the exact phrases that are in the job description if you are including technical terms. That is, if it says "C# programmer", don't write "proficiency with .Net", write C# programmer. HR won't know that it means the same thing or better, so it won't get checked off on the list and it might not get passed on then.
Jan
1
awarded  Excavator
Jan
1
revised Lists of Suggested Magazines to Submit To
clothed naked link
Jan
1
accepted Method for handling non-canonical fantasy fiction
Jan
1
comment Method for handling non-canonical fantasy fiction
I would be very surprised if anyone thought it was derivative of D&D. I should say, it might be obvious from my question that I am surprised that my readers are associating it with D&D. Having my non-geek friends take a look at it is a good idea though. Maybe it is reader bias and not the writing in this case.
Jan
1
suggested suggested edit on Lists of Suggested Magazines to Submit To
Dec
23
revised What is the difference between an ISBN and an ISBN Barcode?
Clarified sentence structure, removed redundant 'number'
Dec
23
suggested suggested edit on What is the difference between an ISBN and an ISBN Barcode?
Dec
23
awarded  Custodian
Dec
23
reviewed Close Quality over SERPs (Search Engine Result Pages)
Dec
23
reviewed Leave Open Legal issue of naming a character after a song character