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comment Is my essay on group learning clear and well-organized?
(4) Yes, one of my biggest problem is to control the length of my sentences. Could you please particularly take a few sentences the above essay and help me analyze how to shorten them? That would be very helpful!
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(3) I agree that MEGO is bad for readability, but do readers think writing all in simple English shows the author's poor vocabulary?
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@Malvolio: (2) I always thought that an concrete example should be a well known story like a famous person had done something famous. Do real life examples persuasive? I mean the readers don't know this "Bob Smith", and they may have the impression that I made that up.
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@Malvolio: Thank you. (1) I reread the first sentence and you are right, after reading a seemed-shocking starter, the read would expect the following paragraphs is going to give them the explanation rather than blah about something else.
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@everyone: Thank you for reminding, I've updated the post and hope a more specific question can be acceptable.
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comment Is my essay on group learning clear and well-organized?
@Lauren Ipsum: Thank you. (1) I wrote the first few sentences just to grab the reader, is that seems so unacceptable? Because I've seen some reports in formal journals use this kind of "flasher" too. (2) I think to use first person just once or twice in this kind of essay is fine. Or maybe should I get rid of the "I am" and change it into like "Sorry, but ..."
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comment Please help me polish this paragraph.
For example: "We all have job" or "jobs"? How about "we all have family/families"?
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Oh, sorry, in case this discussion may be off-topic for this site, I leave my email address here: zhuxun2@gmail.com. Your reply will be highly appreciated!
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comment Please help me polish this paragraph.
Thank you so much for your patience. These suggestions really give me a lot to think. Talking about "ideas" and "entities" (is this right term?) How can I tell when to use which?
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comment Please help me polish this paragraph.
Yes, thanks, that is true. In fact, I've tried hard to add a humorous flavour to the last few sentence, and it turned out not so satisfying.
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comment Please help me polish this paragraph.
Thank you Kate. I'll be carefully studying how to make my grammar correct.