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Jul
22
comment Is it necessary to make clear “when” an event occur in a flashback?
@Lauren Ipsum How can I add the context? Including the whole paragraphs or writing a summary of each?
Jul
20
comment Does it sound more natural to use the character's way of speaking while describing his/her inner thoughts?
@Lauren Ipsum Please see my Extended Example.
Jul
20
comment Does it sound more natural to use the character's way of speaking while describing his/her inner thoughts?
@Lauren Ipsum Thanks for the detailed answer. I forgot to mention that the example above is actually a flashback. I'm using third-person limited. The first few sentences focuses on Rika's aunt and the rest focuses on the two girls. Does that work? I think I'm getting a bit confused.
Jul
17
comment Should a piece of fiction be made of 100% concise writing?
Thanks for your feedback. By the way, what are some of the issues you saw in my passage?
Jul
12
comment Does my title/opening paragraph grab your attention?
thanks a lot, your examples gave me an idea on how to improve the sentence. Though I'm not sure what other adjective to use other than "extra" since (spoiler) Saki came to the island with the intention of having her sixth finger surgically removed.
Jul
11
comment Does my title/opening paragraph grab your attention?
Is starting sentences with "it" and "and" and "but" considered a bad writing practice?
Jul
11
comment Is it a bad idea to turn a short story into a full-length novel?
@Isha me too, I use my short-stories as 'prototypes' for my novels.
Jul
11
comment Is it a bad idea to turn a short story into a full-length novel?
@Monica Cellio advancedfictionwriting.com/articles/snowflake-method You start with a sentence or premise, and expand it into a paragraph, then into another paragraph, and so on. I, personally, I'm not fan of this technique. I prefer coming up with the plot as I write. It's a lot more exciting since the ending is unknown even to myself.
Jul
11
comment Does my title/opening paragraph grab your attention?
Saki has one extra finger more than the average person (eleven if you count both hands). Would it be clearer if I changed the title to Saki's Eleventh Finger? I think it doesn't sound as good as Sixth though (I think you were thinking of the sixth finger of a normal hand?)
Jul
11
comment Does my title/opening paragraph grab your attention?
Thanks for the feedback. My idea was to make the reader wonder: "What's possible relation could be between Saki having a sixth finger and her coming to a paradise island?" I guess I have to rethink the opening sentence.
Jul
10
comment Does my title/opening paragraph grab your attention?
Damn, I think I picked the wrong metaphor, ha.
Jul
8
comment What's a minimum recommendable word-count to generate sales in Amazon Direct Publishing (ADP)?
@Jay Ha, OK you guys convinced me. I'll just let the words flow.
Jul
8
comment What's a minimum recommendable word-count to generate sales in Amazon Direct Publishing (ADP)?
@Javeer Baker I totally agree, Javeer. Nevertheless there's still a sale gap between short stories, novellas, and novels. Correct, me if I'm wrong.
Jul
5
comment Opening a story with a reference to what someone just said followed by a setting description
Ha, nice example. I'll consider doing something like this.
Jul
3
comment Using pronouns properly in order to avoid confusion and repetition
"She told me about how her mother used to take trips to Mount Everest every time her parents fought." I think its sounds as "Monica's mother used to take trips to Mount Everest, every time Monica mom's parents fought." EDIT: Oh, wait, I'm not sure anymore. I think I'm going crazy.
Jun
27
comment Opening a story with a reference to what someone just said followed by a setting description
Thanks. I modified the text based on some of your suggestions.
Jun
27
comment Opening a story with a reference to what someone just said followed by a setting description
@Jay Thanks for the feedback. Ha, the dialogue is just random stuff I came out with. They will discuss about something else. Something more interesting.
Jun
23
comment Is the following sentence structure allowed in fiction?
@Monica Cellio♦ Well, I guess which sentence is more morally correct. Or which one is smoother on the eyes of the reader.
Jun
23
comment Is the following sentence structure allowed in fiction?
@markovchain I'm not sure if it's cheesy. But it has to do with the story. Previously Benjamin talks with Erin about the fact that the concept of things being solid is probably just a human thought. That everything is always in constant change.
Jun
23
comment Is the following sentence structure allowed in fiction?
Damn, I started panicking upon reading the first sentence, ha. Thanks for your feedback.