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Feb
12
comment Is it OK to add chapters to slow down the pace of the story?
@Lauren Ipsum Oh thanks, I'll read the answers to that question. (I think Tommy went to sleep. I don't see him in the chat.)
Feb
6
comment Are the tenses of the following piece correct?
I think you missed a comma somewhere.
Feb
2
comment How much repetition is too much repetition?
Once again, I'm blown away by your understanding of sentence structure. Thanks!
Jan
26
comment How much repetition is too much repetition?
You are totally right. Thanks for the suggestion!
Jan
15
comment Is it OK to use “I guess” in fiction?
As for "He was my only guide right now." There are some similar results in Google Books: google.com.tw/…. I'm still a bit confused, though. I think I should open a new question for this.
Jan
15
comment Is it OK to use “I guess” in fiction?
Thank! What an amazing answer. I guess this also applies to "That's when..." vs "That was when..." right?
Jan
15
comment Is the following “shortening” allowed in fiction?
@Massimo Ortolano Thanks for the info. I think I'll check a climbing YouTube video and rewrite this section. Are you a climber?
Jan
9
comment Is the following “…noun, adjective…” structure allowed in fiction?
@what seems like "lazily" became energetic again: books.google.com/ngrams/…
Jan
9
comment Is the following “…noun, adjective…” structure allowed in fiction?
@what I'm curious why do you think that sentence is less than perfect?
Jan
9
comment Is the following “…noun, adjective…” structure allowed in fiction?
Thanks, not sure why I thought it was ungrammatical. "...its curves flawlessly outlined as if drawn with a compass." I was referring to the curves of the heart. Is the wording confusing?
Jan
8
comment “And” vs “with” in description lists
Hey, you're right for some reason in the picture: c2.staticflickr.com/8/7087/7002468621_6072bb7c4b_z.jpg I only thought about its head and wings as black. Thanks.
Jan
6
comment Is the word “becoming” being used correctly in the following metaphor?
@CLockeWork Thanks. I'll try that.
Jan
6
comment Is the word “becoming” being used correctly in the following metaphor?
Thanks a lot! Just one thing: isn't the shelves and scrolls the reef and algae confusing to read? The first time I read it I read it like: the shelves and the scrolls and the reef and the algae
Jan
6
comment Is the word “becoming” being used correctly in the following metaphor?
Well, isn't becoming acting as a metaphor here? Like it became a nightmare?
Dec
13
comment Is there a coherence problem in my story?
Thanks for the feedback! Yes, I'll publish it as a Kindle. I'll post the link in this site's chat room when I'm done (and if I don't starve to death by then).
Dec
13
comment How to effectively jump from one period of time to another in a short story?
Thanks. You mean I write beautifully? Or that I'm handsome?
Dec
11
comment Is replacing “this” with “a” allowed in fiction?
Why did I get a downvoted? Ha, I think this is the first downvote I get on this site. (I'm full of that @Stack Overflow.)
Dec
10
comment Should I use letters or digits in the following case?
Thanks for the edits. So, in the last example you did it because it's incorrect to use digits in dialogue? And one last question: why twentyfor instead of twenty-four?
Dec
6
comment Stories based on news: are they allowed?
@Mari-Lou A Ha! Wow, English is hard.
Dec
6
comment Stories based on news: are they allowed?
@Mari-Lou A Oh that was a typo. Fixed.