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Jul
19
comment Market for novellas and/or novelettes
Sorry, I meant "...that consist of many...".
Jul
19
comment Market for novellas and/or novelettes
You can do it like David Mitchell and write a novel that consist on many interconnected novellas/novelettes.
Jul
16
comment Main noun: How do you decide where to place it?
Mmm, I'm confused. I read somewhere that the last part of sentence was the most important one.
Jul
16
comment Ways to remove “filtering” in narration?
Interesting. I didn't think of that. I wonder, though, why filtering makes the narrator sound less confident?
Jul
15
comment Is it strange to describe the narrator's facial expressions in a first-person narrative?
So you wouldn't consider the second examples as "telling not showing"? But something that comes natural to first-person narration?
Jul
13
comment What to do with cliched metaphors?
When the mother asks "are you all right?" she's referring to her health (the cold that the daughter previously mentions). Hence, not getting what she wants to say: that there's something else aside from health. I think this is my fault, though. I didn't post the whole thing. I wanted to keep the question brief.
Jul
13
comment What to do with cliched metaphors?
Actually in the end I listened to your advice, ha (and what's). I changed it into this: "Like she'd focus on my individual words instead of what they said as a whole." What do you think of that one? (What happens is that the mother is listening to her daughter, but not understanding what she wants to say.)
Jul
9
comment What to do with cliched metaphors?
Well, actually the mother isn't disagreeing with her. She just doesn't get her point/meaning. Which is that happens when two people are speaking different languages.
Jul
8
comment What to do with cliched metaphors?
How about: "...as if we spoke two different languages, with words that couldn't be translated."
Jul
8
comment When is repetition good?
I see, well the thing that I wanted to do is to express two different ideas with the same verb. Pissed at him = Angry at him. Pissed me off = Made me angry. The first case would mean that she's angry at him. In the second, she's blaming her own feelings.
Jun
23
comment How to make a character that doesn't speak about himself relatable?
Thanks! I'm doing my best to make it good.
Jun
21
comment How to make a character that doesn't speak about himself relatable?
Oh, did that. Can you check my EDIT? The other characters do talk about him. But not too much. (By the way, thanks for the advice. I'll give it a thought.)
Jun
19
comment Is the following deus-ex-machina? If so, should I remove it?
Why it's not deus-ex-machina if it happens on the first 20-22% and not if it happens after?
Jun
19
comment Is the following deus-ex-machina? If so, should I remove it?
Oh, I see. I thought no one in this site would read it.
Jun
19
comment Is the following deus-ex-machina? If so, should I remove it?
Thanks, but wait a minute, how do you know so much about the story? Ha.
Jun
19
comment Is the following deus-ex-machina? If so, should I remove it?
Okay, thanks Dale and Lauren for the info.
Jun
18
comment Feedback: What to use and what to ignore?
@Dale Hartley Emery I didn't do it. This is the message I see: "This question has an open bounty worth +50 reputation from Mnementh ending in 7 days." That means Mnementh opened the bounty? I don't even know what a bounty is, ha.
Jun
18
comment Is the following deus-ex-machina? If so, should I remove it?
@Ville Niemi You mean something like my EDIT? Or maybe that's not enough?
Jun
18
comment Is the following deus-ex-machina? If so, should I remove it?
Well, the opposite happens. She is laughed at at the animal behavior class for asking about animal suicide. That's how a member of the club (who is in the class) finds her. Do you think that works? Or it's still deux-ex-machina?
Jun
18
comment I have three dead-end chapters. Should I keep them or remove them?
@Tom Au I totally forgot about that one. It's not a duplicated question, right?