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Jul
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asked Is it strange to describe the narrator's facial expressions in a first-person narrative?
Jul
13
comment What to do with cliched metaphors?
When the mother asks "are you all right?" she's referring to her health (the cold that the daughter previously mentions). Hence, not getting what she wants to say: that there's something else aside from health. I think this is my fault, though. I didn't post the whole thing. I wanted to keep the question brief.
Jul
13
accepted What to do with cliched metaphors?
Jul
13
comment What to do with cliched metaphors?
Actually in the end I listened to your advice, ha (and what's). I changed it into this: "Like she'd focus on my individual words instead of what they said as a whole." What do you think of that one? (What happens is that the mother is listening to her daughter, but not understanding what she wants to say.)
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revised How to show a crying/sad scene without using sentimentalism?
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answered How to show a crying/sad scene without using sentimentalism?
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revised How to decide whether a story is worth writing?
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answered How to decide whether a story is worth writing?
Jul
9
comment What to do with cliched metaphors?
Well, actually the mother isn't disagreeing with her. She just doesn't get her point/meaning. Which is that happens when two people are speaking different languages.
Jul
8
comment What to do with cliched metaphors?
How about: "...as if we spoke two different languages, with words that couldn't be translated."
Jul
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asked What to do with cliched metaphors?
Jul
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comment When is repetition good?
I see, well the thing that I wanted to do is to express two different ideas with the same verb. Pissed at him = Angry at him. Pissed me off = Made me angry. The first case would mean that she's angry at him. In the second, she's blaming her own feelings.
Jul
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asked When is repetition good?
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accepted How to improve logic/reduce plot holes?
Jul
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accepted How to make a character that doesn't speak about himself relatable?