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accepted Please help me improve this sentence…
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comment What to do if I end up confused by my own plot because of 'trying to be original' or 'trying to make the story more deep'?
Can't help to think of the phrase "The inmates are running the asylum." In your story, does the reader know the doctor is a patient, or is it revealed only when the doctor comes to this realization?
Mar
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comment How to improve this introductory paragraph (to fit writting standards and grab the reader's attention)?
Thanks for posting your samples, they’ve prompted some excellent advice! Please keep them coming...
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revised Which version of these three lines is more likely to attract the interest of the reader ? (character's viewpoint vs omnicient narrator)
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awarded  Organizer
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revised How to improve this introductory paragraph (to fit writting standards and grab the reader's attention)?
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comment First conversation scenes I've written (looking for errors, conventions, and improvements according to writting standards).
This is great!!
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suggested suggested edit on How to improve this introductory paragraph (to fit writting standards and grab the reader's attention)?
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answered How to improve this introductory paragraph (to fit writting standards and grab the reader's attention)?
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comment Please help me improve this sentence…
I'm not entirely sure what that means, could you have a look at my question on EL&U? english.stackexchange.com/questions/16283/…
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awarded  Citizen Patrol
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comment Please help me improve this sentence…
Thanks, great tips, especially re decade. I'm using would as the past tense of will, not as a conditional -- is that the cause of the grammatical problem?
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comment Please help me improve this sentence…
Thanks! These examples make the sentence longer, though; I'm looking for something short and sharp, with an informal tone (i.e. something the speaker might have said in a conversation)
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comment Please help me improve this sentence…
Thanks, I like the "was about to" construction. I was thinking that "I'd" ("I would") made it shorter and sharper, but is it wrong/awkward in this context?
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comment Please help me improve this sentence…
Yes, I like it, nothing wrong with metaphors!
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comment Please help me improve this sentence…
Thanks, I like it -- but the catch is, it needs to be in past tense as the speaker makes this statement at a point in the past
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awarded  Student
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awarded  Teacher
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revised How to make easy and fast money selling a short book (which is available for download)?
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