foggyone

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Nov 19	awarded	Yearling
Nov 19	awarded	Yearling
May 2	answered	What's a good title to a presentations' table of contents?
Apr 26	comment	How many words (or lines) are long enough to make someone think about his life but short enough to hook lazy readers? I've thought about someone else's life.
Apr 21	answered	Is a novel less credible if the dialogues are too perfect?
Feb 3	answered	Getting Inside Someone Else's Head
Feb 3	comment	Getting Inside Someone Else's Head In essence (ha,didn't mean to mimic you, there, Chris), you're asking "What does this person want?" and "What is he/she willing to do to get it?" Keeping those questions in mind, even for minor characters, will help differentiate your people.
Jan 27	comment	Who pays for lyrics or quotes? On a tangent . . . I saw an interesting advertisement, I think in Writer's Digest. The people who make Formica wanted to let writers know that Formica's a trademarked name. Sort of like saying someone used a Kleenex. I don't know if they thought people should have to pay to use their trademark or what, but I thought it was funny. So, remember, use tissues, not Kleenex. And don't you dare Hoover your carpet!
Dec 9	answered	Do you always revise your stories or do you sometimes move on?
Dec 3	answered	Expositing a lack of racial difference
Dec 3	comment	Something different: Help me find the unnecessary words. Oh, and check your comma usage. I'm atrocious at it which is why I didn't do anything with it. However, it looks like you have a few extraneous ones in there.
Dec 3	answered	Something different: Help me find the unnecessary words.
Dec 2	awarded	Scholar
Dec 2	accepted	Can someone explain set pieces?
Dec 1	comment	Can someone explain set pieces? Thanks. The things I found online about set pieces are geared toward cinema rather than literature. I can see how a set piece would affect pacing of the story, building up to the climax and giving everyone a moment to breath afterwards, or not. Like climbing mountains, you cross the saddleback rather than starting at the bottom of the next one.
Nov 30	awarded	Student
Nov 30	asked	Can someone explain set pieces?
Nov 30	comment	How do you vary dialogue within stories? One place I have noticed the "said" is in audio books. "blah blah" he said. "Whody wha" she said. "Twiddle twattle" he said. But that's why we read things aloud and listen for the sounds of things. Change the rhythm up a little bit, drop an unnecessary "said," etc.
Nov 29	awarded	Beta
Nov 29	comment	How to make travel scenes interesting without adding needless plot diversions? Yeah I could see them sitting around and going, "So, Phil, I never knew you were so good at riding. I thought for sure we were going to lose you there for a moment" and then have Phil talk about something in his past that produced his skill. Horrible example, I know. Sort an after-the-fact reaction rather than a rehashing.