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Writers should stick to one tense. Shifting between tenses jars the reader. After all, if you start in past tense, you're telling the reader, "This happened to me in the past" but when shifting to present tense, you're telling the reader "This is happening to me now." It sounds schizophrenic. I'll add that short story and novel writers rarely should use ...
I find both versions quite jarring, not so much because of tense but because of tone. Vociferous adverbs like always, constantly, completely, totally settle too much weight on what probably should be a minor thought, an incidental self-revelation, rather than a significant clinical observation of oneself. Perhaps leave out all those vociferous adverbs, ...
Both are fine - which to use depends on your goal. It shifts focus. Past tense focuses on the fact it was nothing new at that time. It began much earlier and lasted at least until then. For me it's a tone of excuse and explanation, "I couldn't have done anything about that by then". Also, it tells nothing about whether the protagonist fought it down until ...
In my opinion, the present tense sounds better. When I read it in present, I feel the narrator is describing himself. However, when I read the second one, I have the feeling that all those sentences occur only in that certain moment. Not as a "habit" or "this is me".
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