New answers tagged fiction
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There's Fablelane for ultimate short stories that have been co-authored by the entire community. You could start your story there, or read the existing stories. Many of them are adventures and fiction.
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I made up some nice thrush species!
White-tailed Sporcler
Great Blueback
Sooty Saw-wing
Nutmeg Hawking Thrush
Maritime Thrush
Spatulate-tailed Thrush
Mountain Flannelwing
Desert Flannelwing
Rockhopper Bluebird
Greater Yellow-crowned Bluebird
Orange-footed Cactus Robin
Gray-eared Robin
Common Purplechest
And finally...
Westheimer's Undulating ...
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I think your first example is perfect, making sure that you drop out words from the speaker to indicate the passage of time as your foreground characters are talking "over" the speaker. It makes perfect sense to me as a reader what's occurring.
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