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It seems you are mixing two "states of mind".
Dementia means the mind has forgotten a lot, but is still trying to figure out how the sensory input it gets fits together. This does not result in choppy thoughts/sentences, but rather confused and rambling thoughts/sentences, that are searching for logic. Example: "He had finished his coffee, and the mug ...
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The highlights are in bold around my examples and suggestions, but a full reading is a bit more desirable.
It's very descriptive, but at the same time, there are places where it's so wordy that the description is weakened, making it perform poorly as a descriptive piece of writing. When a description or sentence becomes too wordy, even with descriptive ...
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You should cite it if it's not your idea. The simplest way would be something like:
As Mark Zusak describes it in his novel The Book Thief, Death is he who steals our colors.....
You're clearly mentioning the author and the work. If you use Zusak's exact words, quote him; if you're summarizing, make sure you change the quote enough that it's not ...
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General in-text citations like Lauren suggests will almost certainly be sufficient, particularly for a short, informal paper. However, if your paper is longer or a more formal paper (for example, a report as opposed to a shorter research essay), a little more rigorous citing may be in order. But never fear, it's easy to do this.
Some high schools even have ...
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This essay as it stands is not compelling.
We do not know why the narrator has traveled to visit Sarah.
We do not know where Sarah is.
We do not know why Sarah is there.
We do not learn Sarah's answer to the question: "Don't you feel lonely out here?"
We need to understand a bit more about the two characters.
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To answer your question: This is a good start towards compelling. It's a nice read, and holds interest, which can be difficult to do when most of your readers don't have much experience related to your subject.
But for it to be compelling, you need to put more of yourself and your own emotions into it: not just "I would go crazy in her place," but why. ...
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I can't make sense of this. Each sentence but the last seems grammatical, but I don't understand what any sentence means. I don't know what the word "it" refers to in either the second sentence or the last. I don't know what person "he" refers to.
Perhaps some additional context would help me understand this, but I can't make sense of it on its own.
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The particular style that determines the proper formatting will depend on where this article is being submitted or published. If it's for school work, then ask your instructor or check with your program guide. If it's for publication, check what your intended publication requires. Once you know that, we can provide specific help and resources.
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Opinionated people with opinions they want heard are dime a dozen, and if you want essays on a range of topics, search no further, millions of blogs are there free for you to pick for free.
Opinionated people with opinions worth listening to are an entirely different matter, they are rare and few in between. Finding them and recognizing them is a difficult ...
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It is very descriptive. Probably too many adjectives per noun. For example, "sweet, succulent, fleshy mango", I personally feel that succulent and fleshy overlap enough to remove fleshy.
Without paragraphs, it is a formidable block of text to read.
It doesn't seem that cliche to me. It seems to be derived from your personal experience.
Not sure what ...
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I don't think anyone can give you a simple answer to that question. There are many ways to structure an essay.
Some people like to begin by saying "here's where I'm going". This can be helpful if the essay is long and complex, or if the subject is not obvious from the beginning. Like, if you're writing an essay about your views on how to reduce ...
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As Glenn says, it's a poorly formulated question precisely because it creates the ambiguity that you describe.
I don't know who wrote this question and what they are trying to accomplish. In context it sounds like the person who wrote the question was just careless. But such questions are a pretty standard technique in opinion polls or surveys by people ...
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In a situation where the policy position might be implemented in more than one form, your first step should be to lay out the underpinning principles that you recognise.
In the example you quote, I might oppose the proposal for 5-year term limits because I
oppose term limits of any kind
support term limits in principle, but believe five years is too short
...
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It's actually a pretty badly formed policy question. When it comes to crafting a debate or discussion question, you generally want to make the language such that it is a binary choice: Pro or Con. For instance (subsequents are sourced from here):
Resolved: Armed guards should be placed at all schools.
Resolved: The United States federal ...
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A few thoughts about the first two paragraphs:
There is a very interesting future [weak opening] to the use ["future
to the use" is awkward] of information technology in business and how
business views information technology. I believe that [superfluous]
general demands in business as well as user demands [vague] will
change and shape the ...
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There is nothing wrong with Chris' answer, but I'd like to add two things.
First, (c) (from the title of the question) or more accurately ©, is copyright, which is not used with company or service names. So you would never write Facebook©, although if appropriate you may write © Facebook.
Second, ® - as I am sure you are aware, but adding it for ...
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It depends on the style guide you are using. APA format (and I believe Chicago) specify not using TM or R in the text. I suspect that most style guides say the same.
TM = trademark, which a company (or anyone else) can use without a registration with the government. It provides some common law protection.
R = registered trademark, which means they've been ...
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