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body language (as direction maybe if not outright dialog) would be indicative as well - eye rolling sighing / huffing impatiently if someone else is speaking to them interrupting not listening (either poking at phone or knitting without looking up, simply walking away, etc...) being generally dismissive / demeaning of other opinions
"You listen to MY words first; then I'll listen to your words." "Well, ..." [trailing off] "But, but, but ..." [until I get my way, I'm just going to stand here muttering] "Would you prefer to sleep alone?" Blank stare when being asked a question followed by "Did you say something?"
A female character can show that she is self absorbed by her actions. For instance, in my screen play, she takes a cruise with the hero, then decides what the two of them should do and what they should see. She does this while pretending to play "tour guide," but is actually monopolizing the "conversation."
I think I see what your problem is. According to my handy grammar handbook: The exact words of a speaker should be set off from the rest of the sentence by using a comma, a question mark, or an exclamation point. Note: If the quotation is a grammatical part of the writer's sentence, the quotation should not be set off by commas, nor should it begin ...
Difficult concept and varies with style guide. In general, 1) It Is appropriate to capitalize the first word of a full sentence within a quote (motto s have different rules). 2) All versions of TO SAY should be followed by a conma 3) Exclamations such as "Stop!" should be capitalized with an exclamation point at the end. It does not need to finish a ...
Is she meant to be someone the reader/ audience sympathizes with? If no, then try, "You wouldn't understand", and passive aggressive phrases like, "Do whatever/ what you want".
According to Mark Twain, dialogue should end the moment the participants have nothing more to say to each other. However, this needs to be qualified. Ready? Here goes: If you're really talented, there's no limit. The entire book can consist of nothing but dialogue. If you're really talented, that is. If you're not really talented, you shouldn't be writing ...
Keep in mind that your reader wants to read the story, and doesn't care to hear every detail about everything that happens during an event. Therefore, try trimming all of the dialog except the bits that contribute directly to moving the story along. (Read your favorite authors to see examples of this.) Having said that, there are stories out there that are ...
I think it entirely depends upon the pacing you require from the scene. If you're writing it with the action in mind, I would have around a single line of dialogue for every action that takes place. However, if it's comedy, you can be more liberal with the conversation, and intersperse it with summaries of action sequences. "You, sir, have the posture ...
You're probably too close to the scene to tell. My suggestions: 1) Write the scene with whatever dialogue you think is necessary. Put it in a drawer and don't look at it for at least a month. Then pick it up and read it cold. Make notes of where you can't tell who's speaking. 2) Hand the scene to one or more friends. Ask them to tell you what they can and ...
I think it would make the most sense to use the primary language in quotations, because as the previous answer stated, using too many italics would end up making the literature seem cluttered.
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