I am in no academic circles, nor have any friends who are interested in writing, so it is difficult for me to get any feedback regarding my writing. Any of what I've learned has been through reading other masters of writing, like Emerson or Thoreau.
Currently I am reading a book that talks about the importance of reducing clutter and unnecessary words, and from my perspective, I've stripped the following piece of writing to its bare minimum. But from an outside perspective, I'm sure there are many things I'm not seeing.
Mo is a haplessly supercilious man who apparently refers to himself in third person. All self shaming aside, I like to write, some what garrulously, and use words that I just learnt yesterday and pretend I’ve known them my whole life. It is my goal to one day write in a way that would make Emerson proud (or cry).
By craft and means I am a software developer, specifically iOS. Since young, I have been an interloper, trying my hands at all sorts of crafts to find one that I might marry. My passions have alighted from bough to bough, but as I have grown older, my fleeting attention span has abated and settled on to a trade that has made me an all too comfortable man, and this is the state from which I am currently trying to flee. The thrill of living is the pursuit of survival, but once this has been secured, life withers and creativity parches.
I have mostly been, in all my life, a reclusive, social intro-extrovert, with capriciously varying cycles. As of late, I have been surreptitious about my life, for I have been of the thought that the less people know about you, the less they can trouble you. But this has been an unproductive outlook, and this here — this expounding of my life and habits — is an attempt to reverse that, and share perhaps what I would have otherwise been uncomfortable sharing.
Here are my questions:
Are some words not necessary, and can safely be omitted without destroying the message?
Overall objective and subjective opinion, respectively.