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I am trying to write a thank quote and wanted to seek advice on how to make it sound more eloquent...

"To my joyful and loving /name of person/, who brings me the joy and peace to be able to do my work"

Are there better words for loving? someone who has a lot of love to give and always give good love?

Apologies in advance but my native language is not english.

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my joyful...who brings me joy - that's a horrible repetition. Bad style. –  SF. Nov 30 '13 at 15:43
    
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Maybe you can use a metaphor?

For X, the fuel that keeps me going.

(Of course, something less cliched than that.)

Metaphors can make a quote more eloquent without sounding too cheesy.

Once I compared my relationship with a girl with a ghost hunt. And she actually cried (of joy, I think).

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@Chen, I'd like to read such comparison, sounds quite a good one –  Dnaiel Nov 30 '13 at 15:24
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