Recently I started writing a story. Two equally important protagonists, omniscient 3rd person narrator, a rather sweet romance.
And it was not good.
The interactions felt shallow. Despite the ability to get into mind of any of the characters, I was rarely getting in mind of either, and the descriptions of their actions felt dry and not compelling, not immersive at all.
For a try, I shifted the perspective, 1st person of one of the protagonists.
Immediately, I could jump in her mind, add much needed impressions, observations, the descriptions gained depth, the story got captivating and pretty good.
Conclusion 1. Rewrite the whole as 1st person. That works. I can do that.
Conclusion 2. I suck at writing 3rd person. I can't write that immersively. Can't strike balance between peeking right in mind of the protagonist and keeping distance.
How do I fix that? Any exercises? Suggestions?