'The glass filled with water slipped from Kekibhoys's hand while he was lost in his thoughts.'
This is the opening sentence to a short story that three of us are collaborating on. I feel this sentence does not draw the reader into the story and it seems a bit off.
I wish to convey the same idea but want it to be re-worded. Any help?
PS: The story is fantasy woven in real life, if that helps.