As you've guessed from the title, I'm writing a prospective email to venues, about hiring their venue for a day. I've drafted an email, but it just doesn't sound right so I would like some feedback. I want to get straight to the point, but I don't want it to sound to forward... I'm intending to call them next week so I don't need loads of information, just the most important.
Draft so far
To Whom It May Concern,
My name is [NAME], and I am interested in hiring a venue in East London for an exhibition that will be held in 2014. If possible, could you procure me information on the following?
What is the maximum capacity of your venue?
How much would it cost to hire your venue for a day?
Will we we be able to utilize the whole venue as we wish?
I will follow this email up by telephone next week. Should you want to get in contact with me beforehand, my number is [number].