I've started this short story. In essence past this part it's a conversation this intro is to just sort of "set the stage". Does it work? if not what sort of revisions should be made?
Man is an amazing creature he has the ability to create incredible cities in the middle of nowhere. What’s more amazing man will then go on to forget that the city he had built was in fact in the middle of nowhere. But every now and then, you will find a place where one is reminded that this densely populated city used to be forest, or desert. One such place was the Yeshiva wherein our story takes place.
The Yeshiva used to be a monastery, and it looked the part. It was made up of three beige stone buildings looking out over woods. Our story is about two boys who were on the one roof that was accessible. It belonged to the building furthest back from the entrance to the grounds. All that you could see from it was the other buildings behind you, and ahead nothing but woods. It was overlooking this view that our story takes place.