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I have a personal website and I have an "about me" text. I though I'd post it here for professionals to tell me if it's OK (English is not my primary language).

My name is Primož Kralj, I am 22 years old and I am enrolled in 3rd year of Computer Science and Informatic Technology programme at FERI, University of Maribor. I started to explore computers since I got my first one at age 10. I wrote my first "Hello world" program at age 12 in Delphi programming language (without using internet back then :)) and made several (mostly personal) websites. My enthusiasm for emerging technologies haven't smallen since then not even for a bit. I look-out for any opportunity to participate in summer schools, online classes or any other activities that could benefit my know-how.

I am especially curious about the sentence in bold.

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Welcome. I realize this was migrated from English, but unfortunately our guidelines do not allow critiques of a piece's grammar. –  justkt Feb 27 '12 at 13:59
    
@Primož - You may want to look at our critique guidelines. If this question can be rewritten to meet most of these criteria, we'll consider re-opening. –  Neil Fein Feb 27 '12 at 14:41
    
@Neil, thanks, will do. –  Primož Kralj Feb 27 '12 at 16:24

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I would use "lessened" for "smallen" here, and add a comma after "since then", to make it clearer. Also, switch "haven't" for "hasn't".

My enthusiasm for emerging technologies hasn't lessened since then, not even for a bit.

Also, in the sentence after that, "look-out" is grammatically correct but feels a bit weird there, but I'm not sure I can put my finger on the reason. I would change it to:

I am always on the look-out for any opportunity to participate in summer schools, online classes or any other activities that could benefit my know-how.

Also, in your second sentence, you use "I started to explore [..] since I got [..]". This is wrong. Either "I have been exploring [...] since" or "I started to explore [...] when I got". to start is a one-off action that happened at a specific time, not something that has been happening since.

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Thank you very much for your thorough review. I have edited the text like you proposed. –  Primož Kralj Feb 27 '12 at 12:29

Enthusiasm is singular.

Small is an adjective not a verb.

So "My enthusiasm for emerging technologies has not reduced at all since then" would be better.

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I agree with you and indeed it sounds better. I have found smallen to be verb too though. –  Primož Kralj Feb 27 '12 at 10:47
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Smallen is too obscure to appear in the abridged Merriam Webster. Don't use it. –  slim Feb 27 '12 at 11:35

Enthusiasm may "fade" or "wane". These are the usual collocations for "enthusiasm".

Wane: To decrease gradually in size, amount, intensity, or degree; decline.

So,

My enthusiasm ... has never waned...

would be better.

Also, you may use decrease

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Thank you, also good to know. –  Primož Kralj Feb 27 '12 at 12:30

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